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The line graph below shows the average number of games brought by teenagers in a gamecountry from 2010 to 2014

The line graph below shows the average number of games brought by teenagers in a gamecountry from 2010 to 2014 kY858
The given line graph provides the information about the minimum account of games purchased by young ones in gamecountry between 2010 and 2014According to the Console games and computer games, in 2010, around 29 Console were sell, compared to about 34 computer games. The Selling of console games rose significantly over the early 2013, which was 70 games. Afterwards the selling of Console game remained unchanged; however, there was a sudden increased in computer games between 40 to 52 until 2014. Regarding to Homeheld games, it initiated approximately 15 games in 2010 and then dramatically inclined and reached its zenith at 30 games in 2012, before plunged to 10 games in 2013. This games hoverd till the end of 2014. Overall, It can be manifested from the graph that the Console games and computer games showd an upward trend, while Household games noticed little fluctuations, nevertheless, in the end it can be showed downward trend.
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between 2010 and 2014According to the
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, in 2010, around 29
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. The Selling of
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over the early 2013, which was 70
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. Afterwards the selling of
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, it initiated approximately 15
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in 2010 and then
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in 2012,
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in 2013. This
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