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The graphs depict the differences in ownership of electrical appliances and the number of time consumed to do housework in families in one particular nation from 1920 to 2019.

The graphs depict the differences in ownership of electrical appliances and the number of time consumed to do housework in families in one particular nation from 1920 to 2019. AJRGM
The graphs depict the differences in ownership of electrical appliances and the number of time consumed to do housework in families in one particular nation from 1920 to 2019. Overall, the percentage of households with electrical equipment all increases. To be more specific, the figure for using washing machines slightly fluctuates. The use of refrigerators and vacuum cleaners all soars to 100 per cent, especially the former one from the lowest number. As a coincidence, the number of hours spent washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning decreased approximately 40 per cent between 1920 and 2019. To begin with the first chart, the line of washing machine starts at the highest figure among three options, but it only reached 80 per cent, which was lower than the others. The rate of time consumed by vacuum cleaners rose much faster than the former. However, this couldn't still eclipse the growth of the fridge. the other table declares a notable change in the amount of time of housework per week in each household from 1920 to 2019. the line has lessened dramatically for the first 40 years since 1920. Then it plateaued until the last year in 2019.
The graphs depict the differences in ownership of electrical appliances and the number of time consumed to do housework in families in one particular nation from 1920 to 2019.

Overall
, the percentage of households with electrical equipment all increases. To be more specific, the figure for using washing machines
slightly
fluctuates. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of refrigerators and vacuum cleaners all soars to 100 per cent,
especially
the former one from the lowest number. As a coincidence, the number of hours spent washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning decreased approximately 40 per cent between 1920 and 2019.

To
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begin
with the
first
chart, the line of washing machine
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starts
at the highest figure among three options,
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but
it
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only
reached 80 per cent, which was lower than the others. The rate of time consumed by vacuum cleaners rose much faster than the former.
However
, this couldn't
still
eclipse the growth of the fridge.

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the
other table declares a notable
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change
in the amount of time of housework per week in each household from 1920 to 2019.
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the
line has lessened
dramatically
for the
first
40 years since 1920. Then it plateaued until the last year in 2019.
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IELTS academic The graphs depict the differences in ownership of electrical appliances and the number of time consumed to do housework in families in one particular nation from 1920 to 2019.

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