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The graphic describes the process whereby olive oil is manufactured.

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The graphic describes the process whereby olive oil is manufactured. Overall, it can be seen the process goes through 7 main steps, starting/commencing with picking olives from the trees and ending with storing and selling olive oil/ the final products to consumers. At the first stage of the olive oil-producing process, olives are harvested by farmers. These picked olives are then moved to a rinsing machine where they are washed in cold water, followed by being transferred to a smashing machine via belts. During the grinding process, olive stones were separated from the olives and removed while the rest of the fruits is ground into a paste. Before being put into a pressing machine, the olive paste is bagged with holes. Having been pressed, the products are transferred to a machine where they are separated into 2 parts being oil and water, and water is removed. Finally, the olive oil is packaged and transported/delivered to shops to store and sell.
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describes
the
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process
whereby olive oil
is manufactured
.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
the
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process
goes through 7 main steps, starting/commencing with picking
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olives
from the trees and ending with storing and selling olive oil/ the final products to consumers.

At the
first
stage of the olive oil-producing
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process
,
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olives
are harvested
by farmers. These picked
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olives
are then
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moved
to a rinsing
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machine
where they
are washed
in
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cold
water,

followed by
being transferred
to a smashing
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machine
via belts. During the grinding
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process
, olive stones
were separated
from the
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olives
and removed while the rest of the fruits
is ground
into a paste.

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Before
being put
into a pressing
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machine
, the olive paste
is bagged
with holes. Having
been pressed
, the products
are transferred
to a
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machine
where they
are separated
into 2 parts being oil and water, and water
is removed
.
Finally
, the olive oil
is packaged
and transported/delivered to shops to store and sell.

IELTS academic The graphic describes the process whereby olive oil is manufactured.

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5 paragraphs
160 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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