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The graph shows average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates average spending on mobile phone and landline phone services every year over a 10-year period from 2001 to 2010. As is observed, what stands out from the graph is that there were a sharply growth in the amount of money spent on cell phone services, while the consumption of residential phone services saw a considerable fall over the period shown. Futhermore, both services met at the same record in 2006. Looking at the detail, as regards residential phone services expendition had begun at approximately $700 in 2001, after that it went down suddenly to around $4000 during the following 10 years in 2010. If we look at the amount of the other, the trend was opposite which just started at $2000 in 2001, but later grew dramatically to over $750 at the same time. The year 2006 witnessed a similar spending on services while the 2 graph lines intersected at above $500, after two of services had their changes from 2001.
The line graph illustrates average spending on mobile
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phone
and landline
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phone
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services
every
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year
over a
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10-year
period from 2001 to 2010.

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, what stands out from the graph is that there were a
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sharply growth
in the amount of money spent on cell
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phone
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services
, while the consumption of residential
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phone
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services
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a considerable fall over the period shown.
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Futhermore
, both
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services
met at the same record in 2006.

Looking at the detail, as regards residential
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phone
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services
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expendition
had begun at approximately $700 in 2001, after that it went down
suddenly
to around $4000 during the following 10 years in 2010. If we look at the amount of the other, the trend was opposite which
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just
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started
at $2000 in 2001,
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later grew
dramatically
to over $750 at the same time.

The
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year
2006 witnessed a similar spending on
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services
while the 2 graph lines intersected at above $500, after two of
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services
had their
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from 2001.
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IELTS academic The graph shows average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.

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