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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries 2prb

The graph illustrates the percentage of people aged 65 and over from 1940 to 2040 in Japan, Sweden and USA. It can be seen that life expectancy of old people increased in all three countries. The most noticeable trend is of Japan, where this expectancy is predicted to rise considerably in the future. According to the chart, in 1940, the percentage of aged 65 or over people was just under 10 in USA as compared to Sweden (7% ), while less number of old people lived in that year in Japan ( about 5% ). The figures for Life expectancy of older citizens in 1990 was the same for USA and Sweden, at about 14 percent, and decreased even further in Japan, around 3. 5 percent. The life expectancy is predicted to rise in every country, which will be 23% and 25 percent in 1940 in Sweden and USA respectively. Most astonishing figure is for Japan, where more old people will live long in the future ( 27 percent in 1940 ) as compared to other 2 countries.

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