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The graph below shows number of passenger made journey through railway of great britain from 1950 to 2004/5

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The provided line graph compares the count of passengers travelled through national rail network, London underground and liggt rail networks of England from the year 1950 to 2005. Overall, highest number of passengers were recorded in national rail network, while least was accounted in light rail and metro system In 1950, the figure of passengers who were travelled through national rail network was 1000 millions, whereas the count of London underground was two third if that value. By 1980, the value of passengers in national had decreased at near about 700 million, in case of underground the value was under of that amount, was 500 millions. In 2005, the value of London underground had risen to more than 1000 millions and figure ofnational rail was just under of that value. In case of light rail network, the trend was started after 1960 as well as number of passengers were least at 10 millions, however by end of the year the figure was inclined by 20 times. In conclusion, with the passage of time an increasing trend was followed by all three categories.
The provided line graph compares the count of
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and metro system

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was 1000
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. By 1980, the
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