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The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.

The bar chart shows the rates of female unemployment in the countries of United Kingdom, England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland in 2013 and 2014. In graph shows different four countries but there are almost a same rate. Seen in Scotland, highest female unemployment in 2014 and alone number of female unemployment has increased according to 2013. England, Wales and Northern Ireland’s female unemployment rates has a down compared to the previous year. England had the greatest percentage of women unemployment both year 2013 and 2014, with 6. 8% and 6. 5%. Northern Ireland had the least rate of unemployment women in 2014 and Wales had the least rate in 2013. In Northern Ireland, there was a decrease of 1 percentage between 2013 and 2014. This rate 0. 3% in England and 0. 4% in wales. According the chart, the England women had the most unemployment in 2013. In 2014, the Scotland women were most out of work.
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both year 2013 and 2014, with 6. 8% and 6. 5%. Northern Ireland had the least
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IELTS academic The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.

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