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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries BGEX
The charts compare the amount of water used for agriculture, industry and homes around the world, and water use in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo. It is clear that global water needs rose significantly between 1900 and 2000, and that agriculture accounted for the largest proportion of water used. We can also see that water consumption was considerably higher in Brazil than in the Congo. In 1900, around 500km³ of water was used by the agriculture sector worldwide. The figures for industrial and domestic water consumption stood at around one fifth of that amount. By 2000, global water use for agriculture had increased to around 3000km³, industrial water use had risen to just under half that amount, and domestic consumption had reached approximately 500km³. In the year 2000, the populations of Brazil and the Congo were 176 million and 5. 2 million respectively. Water consumption per person in Brazil, at 359m³, was much higher than that in the Congo, at only 8m³, and this could be explained by the fact that Brazil had 265 times more irrigated lands
The charts compare the amount of
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water
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used
for agriculture, industry and homes
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around
the

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world
, and
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water
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use
in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo.

It is
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clear
that global
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water
needs rose
significantly
between 1900 and 2000, and that

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agriculture
accounted for the largest proportion of
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water
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used
. We can
also
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see
that
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water


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consumption
was
considerably
higher in Brazil than in the Congo.

In 1900,
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around
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500km
³ of
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water
was
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used
by the agriculture sector worldwide. The
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figures


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for
industrial and domestic
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water
consumption stood at
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around
one fifth of that amount. By

2000, global
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water
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use
for agriculture had increased to
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around
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3000km
³, industrial
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water
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use


had risen to
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just
under half that amount, and domestic consumption had reached

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approximately
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500km
³.

In the year 2000, the populations of Brazil and the Congo were 176 million and 5. 2 million

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respectively
.
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Water
consumption per person in Brazil, at
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359m
³, was much higher than that
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in


the Congo, at
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only
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8m
³, and this could be
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explained
by the fact that Brazil had 265 times more irrigated lands
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IELTS academic The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries

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13 paragraphs
179 words
5.5
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