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 The given two pie charts show the percentages of cotton production by different countries between 1990 and 2000.

 The given two pie charts show the percentages of cotton production by different countries between 1990 and 2000. 7a3KY
 Two pie charts depict information regarding the production of cotton in five countries in the given years of 1990 and 2000.  TANAM In 1990, India was the country which was leading in cotton fabrication, which was just under a half (45%). Another two countries, Australia and Canada were contributing the equal proportion in thread cultivation with a total 40%, while the least percentages (15%) of produce were devoted by Russia.  After a decade, it is observed that three countries namely India, Australia and Russia experienced a drop in wool making. Though India felt a decline, it was again the leading contributor with 33%. While a significant change was noticed in Russia in which the production growth was nearly half of the year 1990. On the other hand, Canada was only the country which jumped in harvesting linen from 20% to 30% in a given period.  Another unique feature of the second graph is that nearly one-sixth of the manufacture was attributed by China (15%) which was as equal as Australia (15%) while it had not contributed in cultivating jute in a former decade.  To conclude, generally in both decades, the contribution of all countries was in similar order except China.
 Two pie charts depict information regarding the production of cotton in five
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countries
in the
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years of 1990 and 2000.

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In 1990, India was the
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country
which was leading in cotton fabrication, which was
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under a half (45%). Another two
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countries
, Australia and Canada were contributing the equal proportion in thread cultivation with a total 40%, while the least percentages (15%) of produce
were devoted
by Russia.

 After a decade, it
is observed
that three
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countries
namely
India, Australia and Russia experienced a drop in wool making. Though India felt a decline, it was again the leading contributor with 33%.
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While
a significant
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change
was noticed
in Russia in which the production growth was
nearly
half of the year 1990.
On the other hand
, Canada was
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only
the
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country
which jumped in harvesting linen from 20% to 30% in a
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given
period.

 Another unique feature of the second graph is that
nearly
one-sixth of the manufacture
was attributed
by China (15%) which was as equal as Australia (15%) while it had not contributed in cultivating jute in a former decade.

To conclude
,
generally
in both decades, the contribution of all
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countries
was in similar order except China.
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IELTS academic  The given two pie charts show the percentages of cotton production by different countries between 1990 and 2000.

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