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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy used.

The first chart illustrates the various usage of energy in a basic house, while the second chart displays gas emissions that is produced by the leading chart. This data was taken in Australia. Overall, most of the energy was mainly use to produce heat. On the other hand, water heating was the top gas producer, other appliances was below it. Most of the energy used was in water heating and normal heating, 30% and 42% respectively, other appliances used 15%. The rest of it were below 10%, with refrigerator using 7%, the lighting was only 4%, and the least was cooling (2%). To the next chart, water heating was the major producer of gas (32%) with other consumption producing 28%. Heating was making less half than the same utilization, which is 15%. And with a similar percentage, refrigeration created 14% of gas release. Lastly, Cooling and light usage were below 10 %, with cooling taking 3% and lighting was 8%.
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, while the second
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emissions that
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. This data
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, most of the energy was
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was the top
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producer,
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15%. The rest of it were below 10%, with refrigerator using 7%, the lighting was
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4%, and the least was cooling (2%).

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, water
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was the major producer of
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(32%) with
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consumption producing 28%.
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Heating
was making less half than the same utilization, which is 15%. And with a similar percentage, refrigeration created 14% of
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, Cooling and light usage were below 10 %, with cooling taking 3% and lighting was 8%.
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IELTS academic The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy used.

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