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The diagram shows the how particular company produce deep-fried salted peanuts..

The diagram shows the how particular company produce deep-fried salted peanuts. . X7DQA
The rendered man-made process chart depicts the information about the process of producing peanuts by the particular company. overall, what stands out from the process chart is that the several steps are involved which begins with harvesting and ended with peanuts transported to small traders. To start with, the peanut harvesting has been done in the field. After that, the shells are removed manually from the peanuts. Thirdly, after removing shells all peanuts have been put into larger box which can contain maximum 50kg peanuts and transported for storage in a larger container. Following this, all stored peanuts has been fried with oil at 100°c temperature for a 5mints. Nextly, the salt has been added on all fried peanuts and put onto a cooling tray. Once cooling has been done all peanuts has been stored in different weightage boxes. Subsequently, all boxes are delivered to small traders for sale.
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overall
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transported to
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traders. To
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in the field. After that, the shells
are removed
manually
from the
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peanuts
.
Thirdly
, after removing shells all
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been put
into larger box which can contain maximum
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50kg
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peanuts
and transported for storage in a larger container. Following this, all stored
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peanuts
has
been fried
with oil at 100°c temperature for a 5mints.
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Nextly
, the salt has been
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on all fried
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