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The diagram shows how a successful international transaction works from an ATM (automated teller machine). Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows how a successful international transaction works from an ATM (automated teller machine). 73dG6
The diagram illustrated one successful overseas transaction work from an ATM, which is also known as an automated teller machine. This process has six stages, with the contribution of three main factors: the local bank, the customer’s home bank, and the network between them. Firstly, when a customer uses a card or enters a PIN code at their local bank, a message will be sent to the network, which is a settlement provided between the two banks. Once received the signal, the network will send another message to the customer’s bank in their home country, indicating that there are enough funds in the account. Debited money from the customer’s account in the home bank will then be assessed. Next, the network will receive an “OK” message, which means that the money in the home account is durable. Finally, the network will readdress the designated money and transfer the given funds to the customer’s local bank
The diagram illustrated one successful overseas transaction work from an ATM, which is
also
known as an automated teller machine. This process has six stages, with the contribution of three main factors: the local
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bank
, the
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customer’s
home
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bank
, and the
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network
between them.

Firstly
, when a
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customer
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uses
a card or enters a PIN code at their local
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bank
, a message will be
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sent
to the
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network
, which is a settlement provided between the two
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banks
. Once received the signal, the
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network
will
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send
another message to the
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customer’s
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bank
in their home country, indicating that there are
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enough
funds in the account.

Debited money from the
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customer’s
account in the home
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bank
will then
be assessed
.
Next
, the
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network
will receive an “OK” message, which means that the money in the home account is durable.
Finally
, the
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network
will readdress the designated money and transfer the
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given
funds to the
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customer’s
local
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bank
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IELTS academic The diagram shows how a successful international transaction works from an ATM (automated teller machine).

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  American English
3 paragraphs
154 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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