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THE DIAGRAM SHOW HOW HAPPY VALLEY SHOPING CENTER CHANGED FROM 1982 TO 2012. SUMMARIZE THE INFORMATION BY SELECTING AND REPORTING THE MAIN FEATURE AND AMKE COMAPARISON WHERE RELEVANT.

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THE PROVIDED MAP ILLUSTRATES VARIOUS CHANGES EXPERIENCED BY HAPPY VALLEY SHOPPING CENTER IN 20 YEAR PERIOD. OVERALL, THE MAPS FACED SIGNIFICANT CHANGES OVER THE GIVEN PERIOD AND BETTER FACILITIES IS COSNTRUCTED IN NEWER PLAN. IT CAN BE CLEARLY SEEN THAT, IN WEST THE LAKE IN DECONSTRUCTED IN 2012 WHICH, IS REPLACED BY NEWLY CONSTRUCTED SHOP FURNITURE RETAILS. NEXT, THE ENTRANCE ROAD CONNECTED FROM OUTSIDE OF PLAN DEMOLISHES IN LATTER MAP HOWEVER, PARKING LOT IS INTRODUCED IN SOUTH-WEST PART OF PLAN IN SAME PERIOD. LOBBY AREA IN OLDER PLAN IS REPPLACED BY ENTRANCE GATE IN 2012. THE MAP FURTHER COLLATE THAT, IN NORTH-WEST OF SHOPPING CENTRE COFFEE SHOP IS DEMOLISHED WHILST, THE FOOD STORE NEAR COFFEE SHOPS MOVE TO SOUTH-EAST PART OF PLAN NEXT TO ELEVATOR. SPORTS STORE AND ELCTRONIC STORES TRANSFER TO IN PLACE OF OLD ELECTRONIC SHOP. LASTLY, THEAMED RESTAURANT IS BUILT AFTER 20 YEARS MERELY ABOVE FOOD STORE.
THE PROVIDED
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MAP
ILLUSTRATES VARIOUS
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CHANGES
EXPERIENCED BY HAPPY VALLEY SHOPPING CENTER IN
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20 YEAR
PERIOD.

OVERALL
, THE
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MAPS
FACED SIGNIFICANT
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CHANGES
OVER THE
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GIVEN
PERIOD AND BETTER FACILITIES IS
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COSNTRUCTED
IN NEWER PLAN.

IT CAN BE
CLEARLY
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SEEN
THAT, IN WEST THE LAKE
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IN DECONSTRUCTED IN
2012 WHICH,
IS REPLACED
BY
NEWLY
CONSTRUCTED
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SHOP
FURNITURE RETAILS.
NEXT
, THE ENTRANCE ROAD CONNECTED FROM OUTSIDE OF
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PLAN
DEMOLISHES IN LATTER
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MAP
HOWEVER
, PARKING LOT
IS INTRODUCED
IN SOUTH-WEST PART OF
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PLAN
IN SAME PERIOD. LOBBY AREA IN OLDER
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PLAN
IS
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REPPLACED
BY ENTRANCE GATE IN 2012.

THE
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MAP
FURTHER
COLLATE THAT, IN NORTH-WEST OF SHOPPING
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CENTRE
COFFEE
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SHOP
IS DEMOLISHED
WHILST, THE FOOD
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STORE
NEAR COFFEE
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SHOPS
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MOVE
TO SOUTH-EAST PART OF
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PLAN
NEXT
TO ELEVATOR. SPORTS
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STORE
AND
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ELCTRONIC
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STORES
TRANSFER TO IN PLACE OF
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OLD
ELECTRONIC
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SHOP
.
LASTLY
,
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THEAMED
RESTAURANT
IS BUILT
AFTER 20 YEARS
MERELY
ABOVE FOOD
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STORE
.
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