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The diagram illustrates how to produce pencil.

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The diagram illustrates how to produce pencil. In general, a closer look at the figure highlights the fact that the process of producing pencil involves 10 separate stages, commemcing with planting trees and finishing with packing pencil for sale. Looking in the diagram in the more detail, in the first stage, the seeds are planted before replanting when they are 4 months old. in the following 3 years, , they continue to be thinned. Subsequently, the trees are cut down after 14 years of growth. In the next step, they are cut into thin slats before treating for 2 months and prepared for the following stages, Once having been treated slat, it is grooved and glated alternately with black lead and it is then put second slat on top like sandwich after hard-pressing under high heat. the sandwich is cut into small bars which is then honed, polished, and stamped. The entire pencil producing process concludes after pencil are packed and transported to customers for sales.
The diagram illustrates how to produce pencil.

In general
, a closer look at the figure highlights the fact that the process of producing
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pencil
involves 10 separate stages,
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commemcing
with planting trees and finishing with packing
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pencil
for sale.

Looking in the diagram in the more detail, in the
first
stage, the seeds
are planted
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before
replanting when they are 4 months
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old
.
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in
the following 3 years,
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,
they continue to
be thinned
.
Subsequently
, the trees are
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cut
down after 14 years of growth. In the
next
step, they are
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cut
into thin slats
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before
treating for 2 months and prepared for the following stages,

Once having
been treated
slat, it
is grooved
and
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glated
alternately
with black lead and it is then put second slat on top like sandwich after
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hard
-pressing under high heat.
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the
sandwich is
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cut
into
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small
bars which is then honed, polished, and stamped. The entire
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pencil
producing process concludes after
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pencil
are packed
and transported to customers for sales.
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