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The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

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The process diagram illustrates how carbonated drinks are made. Overall, it is a majorly 5 step and simple process, which starts with cleaning water and end with exporting bottles to the supermarket. The first stage is the cleaning of water, in this water transfers to the filer. After that water is softened and chemicals were added. Through the pump water will reach to next stage which is called "heating evaporation and carbonation". In this water passes through the electric heaters for heating water and then cooling pipe will cool down the temperature of the water. now carbon dioxide will be added to water. In stage 3, flavour, syrup, and colour will be added and mixed in the mixing tank. Filtering and filling of drinks in the battles and cans will be done in stage 4. In the final stage, these bottles and cans will be packed in boxes and then exported to the supermarkets.
The process diagram illustrates how carbonated drinks
are made
.

Overall
, it is a
majorly
5 step and simple process, which
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starts
with cleaning
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water
and
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end
with exporting bottles to the supermarket.

The
first
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stage
is the cleaning of
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water
, in this
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water
transfers to the filer. After that
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water
is softened
and chemicals were
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added
. Through the pump
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water
will reach to
next
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stage
which
is called
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heating evaporation and carbonation
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. In this
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water
passes through the electric heaters for heating
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water
and then cooling pipe will cool down the temperature of the
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water
.
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now
carbon dioxide will be
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added
to water.

In
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stage
3,
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flavour
, syrup, and
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colour
will be
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added
and mixed in the mixing tank. Filtering and filling of drinks in the battles and cans will
be done
in
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stage
4. In the final
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, these bottles and cans will
be packed
in boxes and then exported to the supermarkets.

IELTS academic The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

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4 paragraphs
154 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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