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The diagram demostrates the process that can be used to manufacture blocks for the constucting industry

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The diagram demostrates the process that can be used to manufacture blocks for the constructing industry. The brick manufacturing process pass through seven stages from digger to delivery. First enormous digger takes the clay from the special area. Secondly, big digger delivers metal grid to roller carefully. Next water is mixed with sand for preparing mass. There are two different ways of preparing mass. Firstly, it is cut by wire cutter. Secondly, mass is poured to moulds for making little bricks. Then many bricks are put into drying oven. High cooling chamber may reach 870°C- 1300°C. The next stage bricks are packaged for taking away to building industry. Finally, big truck is taken away packaging to constructing industry. Difficult mission is finished.

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demostrates
 the process that can be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 to manufacture blocks for the constructing industry. The You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstoneslabcinder block
brick
 manufacturing process pass through seven stages from digger to delivery. First
 enormous digger takes the clay from the special area. Secondly
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:hugeenormousgiganticvast
big
 digger delivers metal grid to roller carefully
. Next
 water is mixed
 with sand for preparing mass. There are two This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 ways of preparing mass. Firstly
, it is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :minimize
cut
 by wire cutter. Secondly
, mass is poured
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moulds
 for making This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
little
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstoneslabcinder block
bricks
. Then This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstoneslabcinder block
bricks
are put
 into drying oven. High cooling chamber may reach Insert a space between the numerical value and the unit symbol "870 °C"870 °C
870°C
- Insert a space between the numerical value and the unit symbol "1300 °C"1300 °C
1300°C
. The next
 stage You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstoneslabcinder block
bricks
are packaged
 for taking away to building industry. Finally
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:hugeenormousgiganticvast
big
 truck is taken
 away packaging to constructing industry. Difficult mission is finished
. 

IELTS academic The diagram demostrates the process that can be used to manufacture blocks for the constucting industry

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American English

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