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The diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electricity.

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The process depicts the information about how water is using to produce electricity in different parts of the World. It is vivid that, in the first step, the seawater is heated by the sun as well as evaporation also occurs in water. In the second step, the reservoir contains rainy water which has many toxic substances and polluted articles. Thereafter, the dam is further attached with turbines and a water pump. The water pump is helpful to produce electricity with high voltage currents. Afterthat, high voltage cables also connect with pump and turbines. In the third step, the transformation station connects with underground cables which is beneficial to produce electricity in hospitals, schools and houses. Overall, it is clearly seen that, the electricity process contains seven main steps. Ifone step is missing, all the process is damage.
The process depicts the information about how
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water
is using to produce
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electricity
in
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different
parts of the World.

It is vivid that, in the
first
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step
, the seawater
is heated
by the sun
as well
as evaporation
also
occurs in
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water
. In the second
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step
, the reservoir contains rainy
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water
which has
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many
toxic substances and polluted articles. Thereafter, the dam is
further
attached with turbines and a
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water
pump. The
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water
pump is helpful to produce
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electricity
with high voltage currents.
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Afterthat
, high voltage cables
also
connect with pump and turbines. In the third
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step
, the transformation station connects with underground cables which is beneficial to produce
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electricity
in hospitals, schools and
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houses
.

Overall
, it is
clearly
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seen
that, the
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electricity
process contains seven main
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steps
.
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Ifone
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step
is missing, all the process is damage.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows the process of using water to produce electricity.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
137 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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