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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. WKxa
The plans give information about the changes of a public park named Grange park from 1920 until today. Overall, it is immediately apparent that since the beginning of the period, there are still spots remaining in the same position of the park, which are Rose garden and two main entrances, while others are newly added and repositioned. In 1920, the stage for musicians was located in the west side of the plan, compared to the present plan which replaces the stage with Amphitheatre that is built purposely for concerts. The center of the plan used to have the fountain which is now replaced with Rose garden, which in the past used to be separately placed in the park, with four-direction-seat around the garden. At the top right of the plan, there was, in 1920, a pond waster plants, which is now a children’s play area. Moreover, the area, which used to be a glasshouse, is now replaced with water feature at the bottom right of the plan, and there is a new entrance, which leads to the underground car park, near the water feature. Finally, café, which is close to the children’s play area, is also added to replace Rose garden’s spot.
The
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plans
give information about the
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changes
of a public
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park
named Grange
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park
from 1920 until
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today
.

Overall
, it is immediately apparent that since the beginning of the period, there are
still
spots remaining in the same position of the
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park
, which are Rose
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garden
and two main entrances, while others are
newly
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added
and repositioned.

In 1920, the stage for musicians
was located
in the west side of the
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plan
, compared to the present
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plan
which replaces the stage with
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Amphitheatre
that
is built
purposely
for concerts. The center of the
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plan
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used
to have the fountain which is
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now
replaced with Rose
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garden
, which in the past
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used
to be
separately
placed in the
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park
, with four-direction-seat around the
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garden
. At the top right of the
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plan
, there was, in 1920, a pond waster plants, which is
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now
a children’s play area.

Moreover
, the area, which
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used
to be a glasshouse, is
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now
replaced with water feature at the bottom right of the
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plan
, and there is a new entrance, which leads to the underground car
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park
, near the water feature.
Finally
, café, which is close to the children’s play area, is
also
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added
to replace Rose
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garden’s
spot.
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IELTS academic The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

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