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The chart shows value of exports of a country between the years 2015 and 2016

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The bar graph provided gives us the information on the percentage of products exported by a country between the years 2015 and 2016. The products which are taken into account are petroleum, engineering goods, gems and jewellery, agricultural products and textiles. From the overview of the graph we can observe that petroleum has been the highest exported product having a worth of 60 billion and with the slightest increase of 3% in 2016. It is then followed by engineering products which is also comes under same amount but has seen an increase in export by 8. 5%. However, Gems and Jews industry has suffered a decrease of 5. 18% reducing the amount to range of 40 billion. Last but not the least are agricultural and textile industry. Agriculture products have maintained a constant value and has only gained smallest growth of 0. 81% landing about 30 billion of contribution. Last is the textile industry although the overall amount being less this particular field has gained the highest of more than 15% raising it's value from 25 billion to more than 30 billion dollars. In conclusion, The chart clearly conveys that the petroleum industry has been the biggest contributer to the economy of country in both the years which is then followed by engineering and gems and jewellery. But textile industry has been booming in the last one year. However there has been slight decrease in exports for jewelry.
The bar graph provided gives us the information on the percentage of
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products
exported by a country between the years 2015 and 2016. The
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products
which
are taken
into account are petroleum, engineering
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goods
, gems and
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jewellery
, agricultural
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products
and textiles.

From the overview of the graph we can observe that petroleum has been the highest exported
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product
having a worth of 60
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billion
and with the slightest increase of 3% in 2016.

It is then followed by engineering
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products
which is
also
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comes
under same amount
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but
has
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seen
an increase in export by 8. 5%.
However
, Gems and Jews
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industry
has suffered a decrease of 5. 18% reducing the amount to range of 40
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billion
. Last
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but
not the least are agricultural and textile industry.

Agriculture
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products
have maintained a constant value and has
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only
gained
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smallest
growth of 0. 81% landing about 30
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billion
of contribution. Last is the textile
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industry
although the
overall
amount being less this particular field has gained the highest of more than 15% raising
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it's
value from 25
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to more than 30
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billion
dollars.

In conclusion
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clearly
conveys that the petroleum
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industry
has been the biggest
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contributer
to the economy of country in both the years which is then followed by engineering and gems and
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jewellery
.
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textile
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industry
has been booming in the last one year.
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However
there has been slight decrease in exports for jewelry.
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