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THE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE PROPORTION OF MALE AND FEMALE STUDENTS STUDYING SIX-ART RELATED SUBJECT AT UK UNIVERSITY IN 2011.

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The bar graph depicts the information about the for men and women learners participated in several art related fields from linguistics to communication and media stud at united Kingdom university in 2011. It is clear from the graph that firstly, the maximum number of female students participated in English language and literature was about 250 students. While, a slightly lesser participation of men was studied at around 230 students in same subject. Secondly, the second most attracted subjects for women was Linguistics, had almost 250 students in enroll. However, which was steadily decline in men participation with 180 students. The third most favourable subjects for both genders were communication and media stud with around 220 students. Nextly, the least attracted subjects for both genders were Philosophy. Female with 150 students and male with 50 students. In History and Archeology, both sex were similarly attracted by almost 110 students. Art and design was the only one subject with more men than women. Overall, female learners were more participating in five subjects apart from Art and design. While, male students had most attracted in Art and design subject.
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university in 2011.

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participated in English language and literature was about 250
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for women was Linguistics, had almost 250
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in enroll.
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decline in
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participation with 180 students.

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for both genders were Philosophy. Female with 150
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and male with 50
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students
. In History and Archeology, both sex were
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Art and design was the
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IELTS academic THE CHART BELOW SHOWS THE PROPORTION OF MALE AND FEMALE STUDENTS STUDYING SIX-ART RELATED SUBJECT AT UK UNIVERSITY IN 2011.

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