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The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar chart provides data about troubles people face when they move to another country and how these difficulties vary according to age. Overall, as can be seen from the chart, all people experience problems to some extent, however finding school for their children is the least of them for all three groups. Now, turning to the details, the greatest problem for people over 35 years old is having medical treatment, which is under two fifths, while the biggest problem for people aged 18-34 is arranging finances, which is slightly under 35%. It’s worth mentioning that in two other groups sorting finances is not much lower, respectively 35 - 29%. When it comes to finding school for their children as the chart suggests, unlike the people over 55 and the youngest ones in middle age society are mostly affected by this problem, which is under a fifth. Obviously, people over 55 are least affected by this problem, just 3%.
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move
to another country and how these difficulties vary according to age.

Overall
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seen
from the chart, all
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people
experience
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problems
to
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some
extent,
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finding school for their children is the least of them for all three groups.

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Now
, turning to the
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, the greatest
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for
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people
over 35 years
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old
is having medical treatment, which is under two fifths, while the biggest
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problem
for
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people
aged 18-34 is arranging finances, which is
slightly
under 35%. It’s worth mentioning that in two other groups sorting finances is not much lower,
respectively
35
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29%. When it
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to finding school for their children as the chart suggests, unlike the
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people
over 55 and the youngest ones in middle age society are
mostly
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affected
by this
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problem
, which is under a fifth.
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,
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over 55 are least
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IELTS academic The chart below shows information about the challenges people face when they go to live in other countries.

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160 words
6.5
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