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The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons.

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The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons. On the whole, the lowest team A along with the highest team B points were in 2002 while the highest team A points were in 2004 and the highest team B points were in 2005. On the one hand points of team A slowly increasing till 2004 and then rapidly decreasing to tiny fraction (four percent) whereas team B slowly decreasing till 2004 then started to increase a little bit and got just over a half (55 points) in 2005 On the other in 2002 and 2003 team C had more points than team A even though in 2004 and 2005 it decreased to tiny fraction along with team A and team B are higher than team C in 2004 - 2005
The bar chart
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A along with the highest
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B
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were in 2002 while the highest
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A
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were in 2004 and the highest
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B
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were in 2005.

On the one hand
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A
slowly
increasing till 2004 and then
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decreasing till 2004 then
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to increase a
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over a half (55
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in 2005

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C had more
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than
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A
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in 2004 and 2005 it decreased to tiny fraction along with
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B are higher than
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2004 - 2005
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B and C over four different seasons.

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  American English
3 paragraphs
137 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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