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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people within a 15-minute drive service in a specific area in the United Kingdom.

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people within a 15-minute drive service in a specific area in the United Kingdom. PdGp
The given bar graph compares the access to medical, educational, and postal services by the city and countryside people in a specific region in the United Kingdom. Overall, it can be seen that almost all urban people are within fifteen-minute drive to all these mentioned services. Cent-percent of urban and rural people have access to medical facilities. They are all within fifteen minutes’ drive to a doctor. Similarly, secondary school can be reached within 15 minutes by all residents of villages and cities. All city people have a post office in their propinquity. However, five per cent of villagers has to drive more than fifteen minutes to avail postal services. The biggest discrepancy lies in primary school facilities. Only sixty-five percent of villagers have a primary school within a quarter of an hour drive, whereas the remaining, approximately, one third of habitants of countryside must drive their children to far-off schools. Overall, the rural and urban communities have similar access to medical, postal and secondary school facilities but only about a third of villagers do not live close to a primary school.
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bar graph compares the access to medical, educational, and postal services by the city and countryside
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people
in a specific region in the United Kingdom.
Overall
, it can be
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seen
that almost all urban
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people
are within fifteen-minute
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drive
to all these mentioned services.

Cent-percent of urban and rural
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people
have access to medical facilities. They are all within fifteen minutes’
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drive
to a doctor.
Similarly
, secondary
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school
can
be reached
within 15 minutes by all residents of villages and cities. All city
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people
have a post office in their propinquity.
However
, five per cent of villagers
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has to
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drive
more than fifteen minutes to avail postal services. The biggest discrepancy lies in primary
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school
facilities.
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Only
sixty-five percent of villagers have a primary
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school
within a quarter of an hour
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drive
, whereas the remaining, approximately, one third of habitants of countryside
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must
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drive
their children to far-off schools.

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, the rural and urban communities have similar access to medical, postal and secondary
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school
facilities
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but
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only
about a third of villagers do not
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close to a primary
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school
.
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IELTS academic The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people within a 15-minute drive service in a specific area in the United Kingdom.

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