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The bar chart compared with the number of incidents and injuries for every 100 million passengers miles travelled on five various modes of public transportation in 2002. Most of the accidents and wounds have occurred in demand response. In contrast, Commuter rail service recorded the lowest figure. In demand response, the total number of incidents and injuries are 225 and 173respectivel. These values are about thrice as high as the second-highest category, bus service. There were 76 incidents,66 injured on busses. The rest of the rail services have low records of incidents and wounds. In light rail service, the incidents had equally recorded as the bus service, but injuries are 39 in light rail. Next to the heavy rail, the values of incidents are 51 and 35 injuries. Then, the commuter rail system has less accidents and injuries took place where were 20 and 17 respectively.

The bar chart compared with the number of incidents and injuries for every 100 million passengers miles travelled on five various modes of public transportation in 2002. Most of the accidents and wounds have occurred in demand response. In contrast, Commuter rail service recorded the lowest figure. In demand response, the total number of incidents and injuries are 225 and 173respectivel. These values are about thrice as high as the second-highest category, bus service. There were 76 incidents, 66 injured on busses. The rest of the rail services have low records of incidents and wounds. In light rail service, the incidents had equally recorded as the bus service, but injuries are 39 in light rail. Next to the heavy rail, the values of incidents are 51 and 35 injuries. Then, the commuter rail system has less accidents and injuries took place where were 20 and 17 respectively. jwQa
The bar chart compared with the number of incidents and injuries for every 100 million passengers miles travelled on five various modes of public transportation in 2002. Most of the accidents and wounds have occurred in demand response. In contrast, Commuter rail service recorded the lowest figure. In demand response, the total number of incidents and injuries are 225 and 173respectivel. These values are about thrice as high as the second-highest category, bus service. There were 76 incidents, 66 injured on busses. The rest of the rail services have low records of incidents and wounds. In light rail service, the incidents had equally recorded as the bus service, but injuries are 39 in light rail. Next to the heavy rail, the values of incidents are 51 and 35 injuries. Then, the commuter rail system has less accidents and injuries took place where were 20 and 17 respectively.
The bar chart compared with the number of
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for every 100 million passengers miles travelled on five various modes of public transportation in 2002.

Most of the accidents and wounds have occurred in demand response.

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, Commuter
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rail
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service
recorded the lowest figure.

In demand response, the total number of
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incidents
and
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injuries
are 225 and 173respectivel. These values are about thrice as high as the second-highest category, bus
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service
. There were 76
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incidents
, 66 injured on busses.

The rest of the
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rail
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have low records of
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incidents
and wounds. In

light
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, the values of
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are 51 and 35
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. Then, the commuter
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system has
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took place where were 20 and 17
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IELTS academic The bar chart compared with the number of incidents and injuries for every 100 million passengers miles travelled on five various modes of public transportation in 2002. Most of the accidents and wounds have occurred in demand response. In contrast, Commuter rail service recorded the lowest figure. In demand response, the total number of incidents and injuries are 225 and 173respectivel. These values are about thrice as high as the second-highest category, bus service. There were 76 incidents, 66 injured on busses. The rest of the rail services have low records of incidents and wounds. In light rail service, the incidents had equally recorded as the bus service, but injuries are 39 in light rail. Next to the heavy rail, the values of incidents are 51 and 35 injuries. Then, the commuter rail system has less accidents and injuries took place where were 20 and 17 respectively.

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