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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. DA5m
The given bar chart illustrates the utilization and manufacture of electricity in main ten countries in the year 2014. Overall, almost all countries produced electricity than uses. Considering the production of electricity in china was the most significant country than others. It was 5398billion kwh. 4099 had made by united states while Russia was one fifth of china. Almost same figures showed in Japan and India were approximately 1000. Canada, France, and Brazil could be seen 618, 561, and 530 respectively. However German made about 500billion kwh. On the other hand korea got the least amount of productivity that was 485. According to the chart, China's consumers had got same as the production. The difference was 76 billion kwh. United States was the second country which used electricity was 3866. China utilized five times of Russia. Japan and India had same as production. That were 856 and 698. Canada, France, Korea and Brazil were got same trend as manufacturing. It depicted 499, 462, 455 and 499 separately. German had showed 582.
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in Japan and India were approximately 1000. Canada, France, and Brazil could be
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the least amount of productivity that was 485. According to the chart, China's consumers had
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same as the production. The difference was 76 billion
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was 3866. China utilized five times of Russia. Japan and India had same as production. That were 856 and 698. Canada, France, Korea and Brazil were
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same trend as manufacturing. It depicted 499, 462, 455 and 499
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582.
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