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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. njEl

The provided chart compares the percentages of Australian males and females in a variety of age range who regularly do exercise in 2010. Overall, the highest percentage was received by women in the age of 45 to 54, in the other hand, males who did most of the physical activity was the youngest from 15 to 24 years old. Looking at the chart more closely, the female gender, in 15 to 24 achieved almost a half percentage to start with prior to fluctuation. Then, there was a slight rise for female in the group of 25 to 34 by merely 1. 2% improvement. In addition, the bar chart at 35 to 44 criteria, was skyrocketed to 52. 5%. This uptrend kept increasing until the woman in the age of 55 and over, with 53%, before fell down into 47. 1% in the age of 65 and over. On the flip side, in the male groups, the youngest was leading with 52. 8% and the number dropped to 42. 2%. The lowest point which achieved by those who did not exercise regulary, were man in their 30s until 40s by the percentage of 39. 5%. Nevertheless, the percentage risen up significantly to 43. 1%, until reaching its peak in 46. 7% by elderly in over 60s.

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