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My younger sister glued to the smartphone screen all the time because she can’t go out during the Covid-19 pandemic.This makes her health worse and worse, so it has a negative impact on her life. What is the solution for her? Or what would you do if you were in her position?

My younger sister glued to the smartphone screen all the time because she can’t go out during the Covid-19 pandemic. This makes her health worse and worse, so it has a negative impact on her life. What is the solution for her? Or what would you do if you were in her position? eARkG
Find interest in learning is the last solution. Firstly, we should decorate a study corner beautifully in order to have more interest in learning. When you look at the the neat and beautifully study corner, you will want to go the table to sudy right away. In addition, we also should study in groups with friends, because when we study in groups, we will increase teamwork ability, develop communication ability as well as train thinking. Moreover, as opposed to surf tiktok, facebook, we should find more useful knowledge about your favorite field to read. This will help you both gain knowledge and discover things that you love.
Find interest in learning is the last solution.
Firstly
, we should decorate a
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study
corner
beautifully
in order to have more interest in learning. When you look at
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neat and
beautifully
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study
corner, you will want to go the table to
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sudy
right away.
In addition
, we
also
should
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study
in groups with friends,
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because
when we
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study
in groups, we will increase teamwork ability, develop communication ability
as well
as train thinking.
Moreover
, as opposed to surf
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tiktok
,
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facebook
, we should find more useful knowledge about your favorite field to read. This will
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help
you both gain knowledge and discover things that you
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love
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IELTS academic My younger sister glued to the smartphone screen all the time because she can’t go out during the Covid-19 pandemic. This makes her health worse and worse, so it has a negative impact on her life. What is the solution for her? Or what would you do if you were in her position?

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