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The bar graphs demonstrates the habit of both gender in terms of preferring exercise with various age peer group classified on the bases of their age in year 2010. All units are measure in percentage Overall, it is prominently seen that females of three various groups are the most actively participating in the fitness whereas two groups of males seems the least bothered about their fitness regime. Population of both gender are almost on the same when they entered in senior citizen category. In terms of males, the 35 to 44 years hold only 39. 5 percent which is the least population among the all groups. Furthermore, 25 to 34 yrs old group hold the second title for the same with 42. 2 percent. Only in the group of 15 to 24 yrs old males are involving more then females with 52. 8 percent. On the other hand, females age groups of 45 to 54, 55 to 64 and 35 to 44 yrs old are the most participating in physical activity with 53. 3, 53, 52. 5 percent respectively whereas, women lagged behind only in the age group of 15 to 24 yrs old. In the 65 plus age group female still lead with a minor difference of nearly 0. 5 percent. In today's world, people are preferring to gain more knowledge so they can stand alone in crowd. While, some think that flow of information should be facilitated and must be free of cost but many other people resist to this idea and because they thing some information are immensely valuable. This essay will discuss the both aspects of the same. Firstly, individuals who supports the idea of providing all the information freely state the multiple reasons. Providing details of everything with zero cost will encourage every individual to explore and understand the depth of the certain topics whereas putting a price barrier will obstruct the exchange of the data. In addition to that if Wikipedia won't be free then many of us will face numerous problems. Secondly, population who wants to charge money for sensitive data have their own reasons that is result which is obtained after the research work is often result of hard work. So, that price will be a reward or a token of appreciation for that specific person. Moreover, sharing a practical experience is also a flow of vital knowledge which can not be taken for granted. For example people who spent their most of the time to learn something. In my opinion, most of the information should be allowed to access for everyone but when it comes to the crucial data there should be an exchange for that as it was not something easy to get.

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demonstrates
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age
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Overall
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seen
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groups
 are the most actively
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 of males seems the least bothered about their fitness regime. Population of both gender are almost on the same when they entered in senior citizen category.

In terms of males, the 35 to 44 years hold This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
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groups
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, 25 to 34 yrs You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgrayancienttiredelderlydecrepitvenerable
old
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group
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group
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old
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are involving
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then
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females
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On the other hand
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females
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age
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old
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age
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female
still
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In This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :this day and agenowadays
today
's world, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
The verb 'preferring' is a stative verb and sometimes the progressive form is not correct. Try a simple form instead.
are preferring
 to gain more knowledge This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
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stand alone
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some
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think
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information
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 and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
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but
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many
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people
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idea
 and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
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thing
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some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstructionwordknowledgeintelligenceadvicematerial
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 are immensely
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Firstly
, individuals who Did you mean "support"? Alternatively, check whether the singular of 'individuals' should be used.support
supports
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idea
 of providing all the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstructionwordknowledgeintelligenceadvicematerial
information
freely
 state the multiple reasons. Providing This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :particulars
details
 of everything with zero cost will encourage every individual to explore and understand the depth of the certain topics whereas putting a price barrier will obstruct the exchange of the data. In addition
 to that if Wikipedia won't be free then This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
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Secondly
, population who wants to charge money for sensitive data have their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
 reasons that is
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 after the research work is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:frequently
often
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hard
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So
, that price will be a reward or a token of appreciation for that specific person. Moreover
, sharing a practical experience is also
 a flow of vital knowledge which can not be taken
 for granted. For example
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 who spent their most of the time to learn something.

In my opinion, most of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withinstructionwordknowledgeintelligenceadvicematerial
information
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allowed
 to access for everyone This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
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comes
 to the crucial data there should be an exchange for that as it was not something easy to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
. 