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khilari school templed and equal number of boys and girls at the school asking them to pick the one snake they leaked the most from the list given in the double horizontal bar graph.

khilari school templed and equal number of boys and girls at the school asking them to pick the one snake they leaked the most from the list given in the double horizontal bar graph. ewDoW
the bar graph illustrates the information about the different types of choice of food between male and female students at Hillary school. Overall, it is clear that, the male and female are fluctuated trend all the given period. However, the boys ratio found select of snack significant growth, on the contrary, the girls figure decreased than that of the male. On the one hand, the graph shows that chips were the most favourable choice around 280 boys then 230 girls decreased opting for them. On the contrary, fruits were the best choice for the girls, which is around 250. Surprisingly, it was the food item least preferred by boys among the given cusines. After chips, chocolate bars were choosen second highest item in the boys around 250, while the ratio of girls slightly less than around 20. However, popcorn were selected remain constant in both genders 175 each. On the other hand, cookies and bridges were overtook girls than boys. Vegetables was no noticeable differences in both sexes. Moreover, candy and ice cream were choosen most favorable food in the girls around 200, it was the food item Less choice by boys approximately 170.
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IELTS academic khilari school templed and equal number of boys and girls at the school asking them to pick the one snake they leaked the most from the list given in the double horizontal bar graph.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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