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Ingredients in three types of food

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The three pie charts compares the proportions of three various ingredients in four types of food whose less intake is recommended. In general, bigger fraction of dinner comes from saturated fat whose share in the other types of food is slightly small. It is also clear that, the figures for sodium in dinner and lunch are twice as much as in snacks and breakfast. The breakdowns of saturated fat and sodium in dinner account for 43% and 37%accordingly, while the amount of sugar in the very food is responsible for under a quarter. As for breakfast, the figure for saturated fat and extra sugar stand at 16% equally, with sodium constituting less than a fifth. The percentages of sodium and fat are over a quarter each in lunch which consists of 13%of sugar. On the other hand, in snacks sugar has a share of 42%, while sodium is responsible for only 14%of that food
The three pie charts compares the proportions of three various ingredients in four types of
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comes
from saturated
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fat
whose share in the other types of
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food
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that, the figures for sodium in dinner and lunch are twice as much as in snacks and breakfast.

The breakdowns of saturated
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fat
and sodium in dinner account for 43% and 37%
accordingly
, while the amount of sugar in the
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very
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food
is responsible for under a quarter.

As for breakfast, the figure for saturated
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fat
and extra sugar stand at 16%
equally
, with sodium constituting less than a fifth.

The percentages of sodium and
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fat
are over a quarter each in lunch which consists of 13%of sugar.

On the other hand
, in snacks sugar has a share of 42%, while sodium is responsible for
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only
14%of that
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IELTS academic Ingredients in three types of food

Academic
  American English
7 paragraphs
153 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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