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Discribe a big company or organization in your area that employs many people.

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Thank you for this opportunity to let me talk about a company in my hometown that employs a sizeable number of people from the locality. This is a chair company and it has been manufacturing chairs for a long time in Iran. The company employs a good number of local people from the city to manufacture various types of chairs and other accessories to decorate chairs and tables in my hometown. Around 900 people work there and most of them are involved in producing chairs and they work around the day in the company. the boss of this company is a supportive person and he ran into a lot of problems when he was a child, as a manager, he is responsibility for delegating tasks to his employees and also he is ensure all staff members are working efficiently. he employs a lot of person who have a good interpersonal intelligence and have confidence for do creative things. you know, they have a lot of opportunities in this job and this job not only extremely creative but also it can provides an insight into different idea.
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me talk about a
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in my hometown that employs a sizeable number of
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people


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from
the locality.

This is a
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chair
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company
and it has been manufacturing
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chairs
for a long time in Iran.

The
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company
employs a
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good
number of local
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people


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from
the city to manufacture various types of
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chairs
and other accessories to decorate
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chairs
and tables in my hometown.

Around 900
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people
work there and most of them
are involved
in producing
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chairs and
they work around the day in the
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company
.

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the
boss of this
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is a supportive
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person and
he ran into
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a lot of
problems when he was a child, as a manager, he is responsibility for delegating tasks to his employees and
also
he is
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ensure
all staff members are working
efficiently
.
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he
employs
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a lot of person
who have a
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good
interpersonal intelligence and have confidence for do creative things.

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you
know, they have
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a lot of
opportunities in this job and this job not
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only
extremely
creative
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but
also
it can
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provides
an insight into
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IELTS academic Discribe a big company or organization in your area that employs many people.

Academic
  American English
10 paragraphs
186 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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