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Car sales of car manufacturers

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This given bar diagram shows information on the sales by the two car manufacturers Audi and BMW in Korea in 2018. Overall, in the entire year of 2018 Audi has sold more vehicles in nearly three quarters of the whole term than BMW. The car sales of Audi were flunctuating in the entire year of 2018. The bottom of car sales at Audi was reached in the months July and April with only 30. 000 car sales each whereas in the previous month the highest number was recorded. In the month July Audi sold 125. 000 vehicles to customers. BMW documented in the year 2018 in Korea not consistent numbers of car sales. The car manufacturer reached the bottom of car sales in the entire year in the month August with just 10. 000 sales. BMW recorded its peak in the winter month February with 130. 000 regarding car sales. In comparison BMW sold the most vehicles in a month with 130. 000 by BMW and 125. 000 by Audi if they are compared with each other.
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by the two
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car
manufacturers Audi and BMW in Korea in 2018.

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of 2018 Audi has sold more vehicles in
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of Audi were
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in the entire
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of 2018. The bottom of
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car
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sales
at Audi
was reached
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July and April with
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30. 000
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car
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sales
each whereas in the previous
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the highest number
was recorded
. In the
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July Audi sold 125. 000 vehicles to customers.

BMW documented in the
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2018 in Korea not consistent numbers of
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car
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sales
. The
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manufacturer reached the bottom of
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car
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in the entire
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August with
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10. 000
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. BMW recorded its peak in the winter
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February with 130. 000 regarding
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. In
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comparison
BMW sold the most vehicles in a
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with 130. 000 by BMW and 125. 000 by Audi if they
are compared
with each other.
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IELTS academic Car sales of car manufacturers

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  American English
3 paragraphs
177 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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