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A department store changed management in order to move sales in a new direction .the chart show gross sales in five departments in year 2010 and 2012.compair and contrast the information

A department store changed management in order to move sales in a new direction. the chart show gross sales in five departments in year 2010 and 2012. compair and contrast the information Y2by5
The two pie charts illustrate how different departments contributed to the gross sales of department store percentagewise in the years 2010 and 2012. Overall, at the beginning of the period, electronic accounted the largest portion of the sales whereas, furniture and groceries were the least contribution. Im contrast, at the end of the period, electronic remained as the significant proportion while furniture was the least fraction of the sales. Housewear accounted for 15% of gross sales in the 2010, and increased by 8% in 2012. Gross sales from the groceries made up 10% in the 2010 and had a significant growth more than double fold in the 2012. At the beginning of the period, electronic comprised close to 40%, fell to exactly 27% in 2012. In 2012, gross sales from fashion was at 28% and it decreased by 5% in 2012. In contrast, furniture madeup 10% in 2012 and fell in to just below 5% in the 2012.
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of department store
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whereas, furniture and groceries were the least contribution.

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of the period, electronic remained as the significant proportion while furniture was the least fraction of the sales.

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accounted for 15% of gross
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in the 2010, and increased by 8% in 2012. Gross
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from the groceries made up 10% in the 2010 and had a significant growth more than double fold in the 2012.

At the beginning of the period, electronic comprised close to 40%, fell to exactly 27% in 2012. In 2012, gross
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from fashion was at 28% and it decreased by 5% in 2012.

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10% in 2012 and fell in to
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below 5% in the 2012.
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IELTS academic A department store changed management in order to move sales in a new direction. the chart show gross sales in five departments in year 2010 and 2012. compair and contrast the information

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