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Describe a national day in your country. v.1

Describe a national day in your country. v. 1
Describe a national day in your country. You should say: what day it is how it is celebrated what is the historical significance of this day and explain how you feel about this day. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you are going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ]   Model Answer 1: As a UK citizen, I find it really awkward to say that this great country doesn’t really have a unique “national day”, like any other sovereign countries in the world, in order to mark its “nationhood”.   Rather, it has a number of days of celebration for its “constituent countries”, such as St George's Day for England, St Andrew's Day for Scotland, St David's Day for Wales and St Patrick's Day for Northern Ireland. But, since I live in England, I will go ahead and describe St. George’s day as my national day. Saint George’s Day is celebrated on 23rd of April in order to mark the death of a famous patron saint of England called “Saint George”. 23rd of April, also known as “the feast of St. George”, is celebrated by many Christian churches across several countries and their cities of which Saint George is a patron saint. Historically speaking, this particular tradition started by King Edward lll in the 14th century, even though, the incident took place many centuries ago in 303 AD, when Saint George was executed by decapitation because of refusing to recant his Christian faith. By the way, Saint George was a soldier of Cappadocian Greek origins and a member of the Praetorian Guard for Roman emperor Diocletian.   Anyway, Legends about this great saint started circulating in the 6th century, which eventually made him one of the most venerated saints and megalo-martyrs in Christianity. He has also been especially venerated as a military saint since the Crusades. Authorities across England fly the national flag to mark this day in a rather sober manner. Some villages put on fairs also, where the English folk Morris dance is performed, and some churches ring out the 'Jerusalem' hymn. Some pubs put on a “themed day” also. Anyway, I feel that it is great to remember this great saint who had a great role in bringing many Britons under the umbrella of Christian faith. This particular occasion also encourages many English villagers and their families to unite in a common cause which is really great for the solidarity of our people.
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Describe
a
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national
day in your
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country
. You should say: what day it is how it
is celebrated
what is the historical significance of this day and
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explain
how you feel about this day. [You will
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have to
talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you are going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
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Model Answer 1:

As a UK citizen, I find it
really
awkward to say that this
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great
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country
doesn’t
really
have a unique
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“national
day”, like any other sovereign
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countries
in the world, in order to mark its “nationhood”.
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Rather
, it has a number of days of celebration for its “constituent
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countries”
, such as St George's Day for England, St Andrew's Day for Scotland, St David's Day for Wales and St Patrick's Day for Northern Ireland.
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But
, since I
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live
in England, I will go ahead and
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describe
St. George’s day as my
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national
day.

Saint George’s Day
is celebrated
on 23rd of April in order to mark the death of a
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famous
patron saint of England called “Saint George”. 23rd of April,
also
known as “the feast of St. George”,
is celebrated
by
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many
Christian churches across several
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countries
and their cities of which Saint George is a patron saint.

Historically
speaking, this particular tradition
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started
by King Edward
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lll
in the 14th century,
even though
, the incident took place
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many
centuries ago in 303 AD, when Saint George
was executed
by decapitation
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because
of refusing to recant his Christian faith. By the way, Saint George was a soldier of Cappadocian Greek origins and a member of the Praetorian Guard for Roman emperor Diocletian.
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Anyway
, Legends about this
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great
saint
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started
circulating in the 6th century, which
eventually
made him one of the most venerated saints and
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megalo-martyrs
in Christianity. He has
also
been
especially
venerated as a military saint since the Crusades.

Authorities across England
fly
the
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national
flag to mark this day in a
rather
sober manner.
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Some
villages put on fairs
also
, where the English folk Morris dance
is performed
, and
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some
churches ring out the 'Jerusalem' hymn.
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Some
pubs put on a “themed day”
also
.

Anyway
, I feel that it is
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great
to remember this
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great
saint who had a
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great
role in bringing
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many
Britons under the umbrella of Christian faith. This particular occasion
also
encourages
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many
English villagers and their families to unite in a common cause which is
really
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great
for the solidarity of our
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people
.
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15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS speaking Describe a national day in your country. v. 1

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  American English
6 paragraphs
429 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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