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Describe a family not your own that you like. v.1

Describe a family not your own that you like. v. 1
Describe a family not your own that you like. You should say: whose family it is how many family members they have what are they like and explain why you like this family. [You will have to talk about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to think about what you're going to say. You can make some notes to help you if you wish. ] Sample Answer 1: Umm. . . that's an interesting topic, I would say. There are many families I know about and I am very close with some of these families, but I have never thought that I would have to describe such a family. Well, I think describing Emma and her family would be more convenient and natural for me as she is one of my best friends and I know her family very closely. Emma has a family with 5 members- her parents, she, Jonathan who is 11 and Emma's sister Paula, who is a doctor. They live only 5 blocks away from our house and as a friend, I know Emma for more than 15 years. They moved here some 16 years ago and they often visit our house, I would say at least once in a week. Emma is a talented girl with an excellent academic record. The reason she is a very good friend of mine because of her tender nature and friendly attitude. The first time I met her, I found her very sociable, easygoing, gregarious and cordial. Since then we two are close friends. Her father, Mr Alex is an architect and would be around 48 years old. He is working in a large private company and stay out of the town most of the time. When he is not working, he remains busy in his garden. He is quite a devoted gardener and I must state that he has got the finest garden on our block. He does not speak much but I had few conversations with him and I found him quite intelligent and he has a sense of humour that makes him more friendly than he appears to be. Emma's mother is a school teacher and she teaches English literature in grade 7. She is a beautiful woman who loves every living soul. She is also a great cook. She has a natural talent for cooking a variety of food items and this makes her very famous among our friends. Some dishes she made for us was completely unknown to us and she brought the opportunity for us to taste those for the first time in my life. Her father was a photographer and she travelled a lot in her early age in different parts of the world including Asia, Africa and Europe. She is more like her eldest daughter Paula than Emma. I guess Emma is a fine mixture of both of her parents and that makes her an excellent person. She is my friend for a long and we two have a very close relationship as two close friends. I find her very curious and her amiable behaviour and polite way of speaking make her very cordial and affectionate. Paula, Emma’s sister’ is a doctor and she is married to a doctor as well. She had two children who are both in their elementary schools. As Paula lives with her husband, I have met her only twice and know very little about her. She is beautiful and blunter than Emma. Finally, Jonathan, the youngest member of the family, is in grade 5 and he is full of new ideas and joy. He always smiles, plays and talks and has a good relationship with me. I like him very much due to his frankness and his respect for anyone who is senior to him. As he stated he wants to become a great detective like Sherlock holmes someday. This is a good family that anyone would expect as his neighbour. We often visit Emma's family and have family parties. Our family members have a close and friendly relationship with Emma's family and surprisingly Emma's father talks a lot when he is with my father. Probably they love to discuss things together and have common interests and topics to talk about.
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Describe
a
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family
not your
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own
that you like. You should say: whose
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family
it is how
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many
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family
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members
they have what are they like and
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explain
why you like this
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family
. [You will
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have to
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talk
about the topic for one to two minutes. You have one minute to
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think
about what you're going to say. You can
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make
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some
notes to
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help
you if you wish.
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]
Sample Answer 1:

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Umm
.
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that
's an interesting topic, I would say. There are
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many
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families
I
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know
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about and
I am
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very
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close
with
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some
of these
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families
,
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but
I have never
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thought
that I would
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have to
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describe
such a
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family
.
Well
, I
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think
describing Emma and her
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family
would be more convenient and natural for me as she is one of my best
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friends
and I
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know
her
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family
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very
closely
.

Emma has a
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family
with 5
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members-
her parents, she, Jonathan
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who
is 11 and Emma's sister Paula,
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who
is a doctor. They
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live
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only
5 blocks away from our
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house
and as a
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friend
, I
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know
Emma for more than 15 years. They
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moved
here
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some
16 years
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ago and
they
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often
visit our
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house
, I would say at least once in a week. Emma is a talented girl with an excellent academic record. The reason she is a
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very
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good
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friend
of mine
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because
of her tender nature and friendly attitude. The
first
time I met her, I found her
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very
sociable, easygoing, gregarious and cordial.
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Since
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then we
two are
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close
friends.

Her
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father
, Mr Alex is an architect and would be around 48 years
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old
. He is working in a large private
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company
and stay out of the town most of the time. When he is not working, he remains busy in his garden. He is quite a devoted gardener and I
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must
state that he has
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got
the finest garden on our block. He does not speak much
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but
I had few conversations with him and I found him quite
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intelligent and
he has a sense of
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humour
that
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makes
him more friendly than he appears to be.

Emma's mother is a school
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teacher and
she teaches English literature in grade 7. She is a
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beautiful
woman
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who
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loves
every living soul. She is
also
a great cook.
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She
has a natural talent for cooking a variety of food items and this
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makes
her
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very
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famous
among our
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friends
.
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Some
dishes she made for us was completely unknown to
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us and
she brought the opportunity for us to taste those for the
first
time in my life. Her
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father
was a
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photographer and
she travelled a lot in her early age in
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different
parts of the world including Asia, Africa and Europe. She is more like her eldest daughter Paula than Emma.

I guess
Emma is a fine mixture of both of her parents and that
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makes
her an excellent person. She is my
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friend
for a
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long and
we two have a
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very
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close
relationship as two
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close
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friends
. I find her
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very
curious and her amiable
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behaviour
and polite way of speaking
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make
her
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very
cordial and affectionate. Paula, Emma’s sister’ is a
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doctor and
she
is married
to a doctor as
well
. She had two children
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who
are both in their elementary schools. As Paula
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lives
with her husband, I have met her
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only
twice and
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know
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very
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little
about her. She is
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beautiful
and blunter than Emma.

Finally
, Jonathan, the youngest
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member
of the
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family
, is in grade
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5 and
he is full of new
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ideas
and joy. He always smiles, plays and
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talks
and has a
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good
relationship with me. I like him
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very
much due to his frankness and his respect for anyone
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who
is senior to him.
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As
he stated he wants to become a great detective like Sherlock
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holmes
someday.

This is a
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good
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family
that anyone would
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expect
as his
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neighbour
. We
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often
visit Emma's
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family
and have
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family
parties. Our
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family
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members
have a
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close
and friendly relationship with Emma's
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family
and
surprisingly
Emma's
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father
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talks
a lot when he is with my
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father
.
Probably
they
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love
to discuss things together and have common interests and topics to
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talk
about.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
53Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22Mistakes

IELTS speaking Describe a family not your own that you like. v. 1

Speaking
  American English
8 paragraphs
710 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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