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You work in an office and have recently been experiencing a health problem. You think that the problem started because of the working conditions in the office. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • describe the health problem • explain why you think it was caused by conditions in the office • suggest what the manager should do to improve the working conditions in the office

You work in an office and have recently been experiencing a health problem. You think that the problem started because of the working conditions in the office. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • describe the health problem • explain why you think it was caused by conditions in the office • suggest what the manager should do to improve the working conditions in the office KMm0
Dear Mr. Brown, Greetings of the day! I, Jenny Jackson, IT department, employee ID -1212-IT, am writing this letter in order to inform you about the medical issue I am suffering from the past few weeks. Even if the work culture is extremely employee-friendly, I think due to some causative factors, I am facing these health problems. At the onset, let me brief you on the specifics of my health concerns. First of all, while prolonged sitting in front of computer screens, I have been experiencing severe headaches as well as blurred vision. Moreover, considering this a minor issue, I overlooked this problem and started taking pain-killers. However, over time this is becoming more worsened, resulting in excruciating pain. Further, even though being a healthy person along with taking a nutritious diet, I have never encountered such kind of situation. I tried to the underlying reasons behind this matter; I found that this condition mainly occurred due to bad lighting in my cubicle that has mainly caused the problem of visual impairment as examined by the physician. Finally, I would like to add to your knowledge that this kind of issue is also there in many other parts of our office premises. Thus, while considering the plight, kindly do the needful as soon as possible by renovating the lighting system. Additionally, if some yoga or distressing sessions can be arranged for the member of staff, it would be highly appreciable. I would be really thankful if you can please look into this matter. Yours sincerely, Jenny Smith
Dear Mr. Brown,

Greetings of the day! I, Jenny Jackson, IT department, employee ID -1212-IT,
am
writing this letter in order to inform you about the medical issue I am suffering from the past few weeks. Even if the work culture is
extremely
employee-friendly, I
think
due to
some
causative factors, I am facing these health problems.

At the onset,
let
me brief you on the specifics of my health concerns.
First of all
, while prolonged sitting in front of computer screens, I have been experiencing severe headaches
as well
as blurred vision.
Moreover
, considering this a minor issue, I overlooked this problem and
started
taking pain-killers.
However
, over time this is becoming more worsened, resulting in excruciating pain.

Further
,
even though
being a healthy person along with taking a nutritious diet, I have never encountered such kind of situation. I tried to the underlying reasons behind this matter; I found that this condition
mainly
occurred due to
bad
lighting in my cubicle that has
mainly
caused the problem of visual impairment as examined by the physician.

Finally
, I would like to
add
to your knowledge that this kind of issue is
also
there in
many
other parts of our office premises.
Thus
, while considering the plight, kindly do the needful as
soon
as possible by renovating the lighting system.
Additionally
, if
some
yoga or distressing sessions can
be arranged
for the member of staff, it would be
highly
appreciable.

I would be
really
thankful if you can
please
look into this matter.

Yours
sincerely
,

Jenny Smith
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IELTS letter You work in an office and have recently been experiencing a health problem. You think that the problem started because of the working conditions in the office. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • describe the health problem • explain why you think it was caused by conditions in the office • suggest what the manager should do to improve the working conditions in the office

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  American English
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256 words
6.5
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