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You recently had your computer fixed at the local computer store, however, you are not pleased with the service you received. Write a letter to the store manager. in the letter -Describe the situation -explain why you are dissatisfied -say what you want the manager to do You should write at least 150 words.

You recently had your computer fixed at the local computer store, however, you are not pleased with the service you received. Write a letter to the store manager. in the letter -Describe the situation -explain why you are dissatisfied -say what you want the manager to do kDKO
Dear Mr. Smith I am a regural customer of your store. I bought a Dell Pro Model 1. 3 from your store this January and recently upgraded my laptop to make it better compatible with the software demanding some graphics configuration. I write this letter to express my dissatisfaction over the performance of my laptop even after such an investment. It is well known to you that the specified model alone is enough for professional graphical softwares. It was well-mentioned in the promotional brocure of the laptop which you had for your new year's sale. But, when I started using the laptop it crased frequently displaying problems related to graphical configuration. I consulted sales support team on 12th Feb and they proposed to add a graphic card which will totally eliminate the problem and enhance the processing speed. The hardware configuration required for the softwares that I use is more than enough but some how it does not perform as expected. I researched on the matter and figured out that the 240GB graphic card you used in the upgrading was not the best match, cheaper and with low warrenty. I demand replacement of graphic card with Nvdia company of at least same specification. I am sure this is not much considering the heafty charge that I paid for. Otherwise, consider me a lost customer. I Look forward for your prompt action in the matter. Yours truly, Peter
Dear Mr. Smith

I am a
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regural
customer of your store. I
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bought
a Dell Pro Model 1. 3 from your store this January and recently

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upgraded
my
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laptop
to
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make
it better compatible with the software demanding
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some
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graphics
configuration.

I write this letter to express my dissatisfaction over the performance of my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
even after such an investment.

It is well known to you that the specified model alone is
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enough
for professional graphical
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softwares
. It was well-mentioned in
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the


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promotional
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brocure
of the
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laptop
which you had for your new year's sale.
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But
, when I
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started
using the
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laptop
it
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crased
frequently
displaying

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problems
related to graphical configuration. I consulted sales support team on 12th
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Feb and
they proposed to
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add
a graphic card which will

totally
eliminate the problem and enhance the processing speed. The hardware configuration required for the
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softwares
that I
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use
is more than
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enough
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but


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some how
it does not perform as
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expected
. I researched on the matter and figured out that the
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240GB
graphic card you
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used
in the upgrading was not the
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best


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match
, cheaper and with low
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warrenty
.

I demand replacement of graphic card with
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Nvdia
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company
of at least same specification. I am sure this is not much considering the

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heafty
charge that I paid for.
Otherwise
, consider me a lost customer. I Look forward for your prompt action in the matter.

Yours
truly
,

Peter
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IELTS letter You recently had your computer fixed at the local computer store, however, you are not pleased with the service you received. Write a letter to the store manager. in the letter -Describe the situation -explain why you are dissatisfied -say what you want the manager to do

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  American English
11 paragraphs
236 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.0
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