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The reading claims that the Greeks defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a burning mirror, but there are several reasons to suspect that the story of the burning mirror is just a myth and the Greeks never rally built such device.

The reading claims that the Greeks defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a burning mirror, but there are several reasons to suspect that the story of the burning mirror is just a myth and the Greeks never rally built such device. bYOYq
The reading claims that the Greeks defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a burning mirror, but there are several reasons to suspect that the story of the burning mirror is just a myth and the Greeks never rally built such device. It provides three reasons of support. In contrast, the professor states that the reasons in the reading are unconvincing and she refutes each of the author's reasons. First, the article avers that the ancient Greeks were not technologically advanced enough to make such a device. On the other hand, the speaker opposes this point by saying that an experiment showed that Greeks arranged mirror by small pieces of mirrors so they didn't need to to set the mirror with a large sheet of copper. This appears a contradiction to the information made in the passage. Second, the passage posits that the burning mirror would have taken a long time to set the ships on fire. However, the professor counters this point by stating that the experiment explained in the reading used to set the fire on wood ships and it took ten minutes, but she states that not all materials in the ships were wood. In fact, she mentions that sticky substances called pitches were added to ships because they are water proof and these materials catch fire very quickly. So, burning mirror set a fire in seconds while the ship was moving. This approves that burnig mirror is an effective weapon. This challenges the second point made in the article. Third, the article asserts that the burning mirror does not seem like an improvement on a weapon that the Greeks already had: flaming arrows. Conversely, the professor casts doubt on this point by explaining that Roman soldiers were familiar with flaming arrows, but with burning mirror, they couldn't see the fire. Actually, burning mirror would be much surprising and much effective than flaming arrows. This disputes the information in the passage.
The reading claims that the Greeks defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a
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burning
mirror,
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but
there are several reasons to suspect that the story of the
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mirror is
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just
a myth and the Greeks never rally built such device. It provides three reasons of support.
In contrast
, the professor states that the reasons in the reading are
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unconvincing and
she refutes each of the author's reasons.

First
, the article avers that the ancient Greeks were not
technologically
advanced
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enough
to
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make
such a device.
On the other hand
, the speaker opposes this
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point
by saying that an experiment
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showed
that Greeks arranged mirror by
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small
pieces of mirrors
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so
they didn't need
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to to
set the mirror with a large sheet of copper. This appears a contradiction to the information made in the passage.

Second, the passage posits that the
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burning
mirror would have taken a long time to set the
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ships
on
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fire
.
However
, the professor counters this
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point
by stating that the experiment
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explained
in the reading
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used
to set the
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fire
on wood
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ships
and it took ten minutes,
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but
she states that not all materials in the
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ships
were wood. In fact, she mentions that sticky substances called pitches were
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added
to
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ships
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because
they are
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water proof
and these materials catch
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fire
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very
quickly
.
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So
,
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burning
mirror set a
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fire
in seconds while the
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ship
was moving. This approves that
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burnig
mirror is an effective weapon. This challenges the second
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point
made in the article.

Third, the article asserts that the
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burning
mirror does not seem like an improvement on a weapon that the Greeks already had: flaming arrows.
Conversely
, the professor casts doubt on this
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point
by explaining that Roman soldiers were familiar with flaming arrows,
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but
with
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burning
mirror, they couldn't
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see
the
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fire
. Actually,
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burning
mirror would be much surprising and much
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effective
than flaming arrows. This disputes the information in the passage.
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IELTS essay The reading claims that the Greeks defended themselves with an ingenious weapon called a burning mirror, but there are several reasons to suspect that the story of the burning mirror is just a myth and the Greeks never rally built such device.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
324 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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