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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today Nr8lg
The Given Flowchart illustrates a public park when it is first opened in 1920 and today. Overall, it is evident that everything is changed except both the main entrances and one out of 3 rose gardens. Firstly, turning to far left side, the stage used for musicians had converted to Amphitheatre for concerts. Comming to center of the park, both entrances name Arnold avenue and eldon sttreet remain same while the fountain is converted to rectangular rose garden followed by seating on either sides. On the other hand, the far right, pond for water plants is replaced by play area for childrens. Glasshouse area is now renovated to water feature. Additionally, there is a car parking facility available under water feature in the underground. Also, there is a cafe available on the left of arnold avenue entrance
The
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Given
Flowchart illustrates a public park when it is
first
opened in 1920 and
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today
.

Overall
, it is evident that everything is
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changed
except both the main entrances and one out of 3 rose gardens.

Firstly
, turning to far
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left
side, the stage
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used
for musicians had converted to
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Amphitheatre
for concerts.
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Comming
to center of the park, both entrances name Arnold avenue and
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eldon
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sttreet
remain same while the fountain
is converted
to rectangular rose garden followed by seating on either sides.

On the other hand
, the far right, pond for water plants
is replaced
by play area for
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childrens
. Glasshouse area is
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now
renovated to water feature.
Additionally
, there is a car parking facility available under water feature in the underground.
Also
, there is a
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cafe
available on the
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left
of
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arnold
avenue entrance
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IELTS essay The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today

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