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The lecture and reading are about evidence found from fossils of Tyrannosaurus.

The lecture and reading are about evidence found from fossils of Tyrannosaurus. 7aK9A
The lecture and reading are about evidence found from fossils of Tyrannosaurus. The author mentions that the fossils contain exceptional materials. The lecturer challenges the announcement made by author. He is of the opinion that these explanations are contradictory. To begin with, the author argues that there was many elastic, soft particles inside the channels, which is likely to be residual of the actual blood vessel of the dinosaur. Nonetheless, this particular argument is challenged by the lecturer. He claims the residual cannot be requisite telltale because bacteria may have colonized in hollows from which soft tissues were found. Therefore, specimen is probably of the microorganism but the dinosaur. Secondly, according to the reading passage, bone has been containing red blood cells, but lecturer refuted this. As he stated, fossils revealed from surrounding area was not containing cells. Moreover, the substance is perhaps just some reddish stuff rather than iron of the blood. Finally, lecturer noted that there is another interpretation about the fibrous protein. To be more particular, the most ancient evidence of collagen is dated around hundred thousand years ago, so the idea that this fossil's age is twenty million is controversial. He elaborates on this idea by bringing up the point that the protein is probably from other contemporary sources such as human skin. Moreover, professor stated that clarification that this is remain of scholars who found fossils.
The lecture and reading are about evidence found from
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of Tyrannosaurus. The author mentions that the
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contain exceptional materials.
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The
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challenges the announcement made by author. He is of the opinion that these explanations are contradictory.

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with, the author argues that there was
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many
elastic, soft particles inside the channels, which is likely to be residual of the actual blood vessel of the dinosaur. Nonetheless, this particular argument
is challenged
by the
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lecturer
. He claims the residual cannot be requisite telltale
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because
bacteria may have colonized in hollows from which soft tissues
were found
.
Therefore
, specimen is
probably
of the microorganism
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but
the dinosaur.

Secondly
, according to the reading passage, bone has been containing red blood cells,
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but
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lecturer
refuted this. As he stated,
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fossils
revealed from surrounding area
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was not containing
cells.
Moreover
, the substance is perhaps
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just
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some
reddish stuff
rather
than iron of the blood.

Finally
,
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lecturer
noted that there is another interpretation about the fibrous protein. To be more particular, the most ancient evidence of collagen
is dated
around hundred thousand years ago,
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so
the
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idea
that this fossil's age is twenty million is controversial. He elaborates on this
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idea
by bringing up the point that the protein is
probably
from other contemporary sources such as human skin.
Moreover
, professor stated that clarification that this is
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remain
of scholars who found
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fossils
.

IELTS essay The lecture and reading are about evidence found from fossils of Tyrannosaurus.

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