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Television is an essential part of life

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The importance of television which was always debatable has now become more controversial with many people claiming that it is beneficial while others reject this notion. In my opinion, the former preposition appear to be more rational. This essay will further elaborate the positive effects of these trend and thus will lead to a logical conclusion. There are myriad of reasons which will further explain this arguments but the most alarming one is that the television is very essential part of life because it gives some information about culture, news and, language. Moreover, the television provides us various channels such as news channels, entertainment channels and sports channels. Needless to say all these merits stand in a good stead. Elaborating my viewpoint, there are some more merits but one of the crucial effect is that the television provides us latest news which is very fruitful because people can aware about new budgets and as well as politics information. Furthermore, the television provides some learning channels which helps to students to learn various things such as new language and they also learn their subjects easily. According to the arguments aforementioned above one can reach a conclusion is that the benefits of television are indeed too great to ignore.
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which was always debatable has
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become more controversial with
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claiming that it is beneficial while others reject this notion. In my opinion, the former preposition appear to be more rational. This essay will
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effects of these trend and
thus
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the most alarming one is that the
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very
essential part of life
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because
it gives
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some
information about culture,
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news
and, language.
Moreover
, the
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television
provides us various
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channels
such as
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news
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channels
, entertainment
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channels
and sports
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channels
. Needless to say all these merits stand in a
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good
stead.

Elaborating my viewpoint, there are
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some
more merits
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but
one of the crucial effect is that the
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television
provides us
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latest
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news
which is
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very
fruitful
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because
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people
can aware about
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new
budgets and
as well
as politics information.
Furthermore
, the
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television
provides
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some
learning
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channels
which
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helps
to students to learn various things such as
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new
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language and
they
also
learn their subjects
easily
.

According to the arguments aforementioned above one can reach a conclusion is that the benefits of
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television
are
indeed
too great to
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ignore
.
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IELTS essay Television is an essential part of life

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
207 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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