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Some people believe the elderly said that life was better in the past Do you agree or disagree

Some people believe the elderly said that life was better in the past PVXBE
Some individuals consider it true when geriatrics said that life in the previous time was better. I, however, discord with this view as I believe though in terms of living style life was better in the past time, but due to communication, contemporary time’s people are enjoying the most. Lifestyle and affection amongst society were, undoubtedly, way better in past time. Due to less occurrence of technology, people had to perform physically involved activities which were beneficial in terms of motor skills. Agriculture is good paradigm of this where individuals of early days had to perform all the chores manually and kept themselves fit. Also, the prevalent mode of entertainment was interacting with others and playing games together. People did not have computers as well as the internet, for killing their leisure time, hence, they had to indulge with the society. This substantially breed the feeling of uniformity among individuals. In contrast, nowadays owing to technology, everyone not only living sedentary lifestyle but also socializing at home and spending their life in isolation. I, nevertheless, believe that invention of new ways of communications, be it in the form of transportation or mobile phones and the internet, life of human beings is free from plenty of hassle and jeopardy. In order to talk or meet with kith and kin, it is matter of few clicks either to make a video call or book train, flight or bus to visit them within few hours. In old times, on the other hand, it took several days to convey a message in a letter or reach physically to the concerned ones. It was quite inconvenient for ones to lend helping hands to relatives in their tough times. These days, it became enormously comfortable to provide assistance then and there to other people. In conclusion, despite the lethargatic life and diminished feeling of fraternity in the society in current time, I think modes of communication had been proved very beneficial for people of modern times to commute.
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was better. I,
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, discord with this view as I believe though in terms of living style
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life
was better in the past
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,
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due to communication, contemporary
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time’s
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people
are enjoying the most.

Lifestyle and affection amongst society were,
undoubtedly
, way better in past
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time
. Due to less occurrence of technology,
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people
had to perform
physically
involved activities which were beneficial in terms of motor
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skills
. Agriculture is
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good
paradigm of this where individuals of early days had to perform all the chores
manually
and
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kept
themselves fit.
Also
, the prevalent mode of entertainment was interacting with others and playing games together.
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People
did not have computers
as well
as the internet, for killing their leisure
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time
,
hence
, they had to indulge with the society. This
substantially
breed the feeling of uniformity
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among
individuals.
In contrast
, nowadays owing to technology, everyone not
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only
living sedentary lifestyle
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but
also
socializing at home and spending their
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life
in isolation.

I,
nevertheless
, believe that invention of new ways of communications, be it in the form of transportation or mobile phones and the internet,
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life
of human beings is free from
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plenty
of hassle and jeopardy. In order to talk or
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meet
with kith and kin, it is matter of few clicks either to
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make
a video call or book train, flight or bus to visit them within few hours. In
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old
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times
,
on the other hand
, it took several days to convey a message in a letter or reach
physically
to the concerned ones. It was quite inconvenient for ones to lend helping hands to relatives in their tough
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times
. These days, it became
enormously
comfortable to provide assistance then and there to other
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people
.

In conclusion
, despite the
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lethargatic
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life
and diminished feeling of fraternity in the society in
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current
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time
, I
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think
modes of communication had
been proved
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very
beneficial for
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people
of modern
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times
to commute.
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IELTS essay Some people believe the elderly said that life was better in the past

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
332 words
5.5
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