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Recently, there has been a ton of debate as to the existance of bees as early as 200 million years ago.

Recently, there has been a ton of debate as to the existance of bees as early as 200 million years ago. QLn0K
Recently, there has been a ton of debate as to the existance of bees as early as 200 million years ago. More specially, in regards to the passages the author of the reading puts forth the idea that it cannot be possible for bees to be existed from 200 million years ago and he mentions that the skepticals refuse this point of view by some arguments. The professor in the listening is quick to point out there are some serious flaws in the writer's claim. In fact she believes there are some reasonable evidence that showes the life of bees in that time, and she addresses, in detail, the trouble with each point made in the reading text. First and foremost, the author states that deficient actual fossils of bees are is a good point to refuse the existance of bees in that time. Some professionals in the same field, however, stand in firm opposition to this claim. For example the speaker in the listening passage state that devoid of fossil evidences of bees does not mean they had not been alive in those time, and she goes on to say that there are no fossil evidence of bees, because they could not fossilize in that period of time. One group ofscholars, represented by the author, think absence of flower as the main food resource of bees, reminds that there are no chance for bees to be alive 200 million years ago. Of course, though, not all experts in the same field bellieve this is accurate. Again the professor states it could be plausible that bees in that time were feeding by non-flowering plant recpectly to the bees revolutionary. Finally the writer wraps his argument by positing that there are no sufficient details on fossilized structures found in Arizona to improve the existance of bees. Not surprisingly, the professor takes issue with this matter by contending that there is a chemical evidence of water proof matterial on these fossils which probably were made by bees, because bees produce water proof material in some kind of living activities
Recently, there has been a ton of debate as to the
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existance
of bees as early as 200 million years ago. More
specially
,
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in regards to
the passages the author of the reading puts forth the
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idea
that it cannot be possible for bees to
be existed
from 200 million years
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ago and
he mentions that the
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skepticals
refuse this
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point
of view by
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some
arguments. The professor in the listening is quick to
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point
out there are
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some
serious flaws in the writer's claim. In
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fact she
believes there are
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some
reasonable
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evidence
that
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showes
the life of bees in that
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time
, and she addresses, in detail, the trouble with each
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point
made in the reading text.

First
and foremost, the author states that deficient actual
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fossils
of bees are is a
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good
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point
to refuse the
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existance
of bees in that
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time
.
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Some
professionals in the same field,
however
, stand in firm opposition to this claim.
For example
the speaker in the listening passage state that devoid of
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fossil
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evidences
of bees does not mean they had not been alive in those
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time
, and she goes on to say that there are no
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fossil
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evidence
of bees,
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because
they could not fossilize in that period of time.

One group
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ofscholars
, represented by the author,
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think
absence of flower as the main food resource of bees, reminds that there are no chance for bees to be alive 200 million years ago.
Of course
, though, not all experts in the same field
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bellieve
this is accurate. Again the professor states it could be plausible that bees in that
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time
were feeding by non-flowering plant
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recpectly
to the bees revolutionary.

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Finally
the writer wraps his argument by positing that there are no sufficient
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details
on fossilized structures found in Arizona to
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improve
the
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existance
of bees. Not
surprisingly
, the professor takes issue with this matter by contending that there is a chemical
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evidence
of
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water proof
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matterial
on these
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fossils
which
probably
were made
by bees,
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because
bees produce
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water proof
material in
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some
kind of living
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activities
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IELTS essay Recently, there has been a ton of debate as to the existance of bees as early as 200 million years ago.

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  American English
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346 words
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