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Nowadays there is a grater focus at all levels in education on science and business studies rather than the arts

Nowadays there is a grater focus at all levels in education on science and business studies rather than the arts E2eQ
The advances in technology are being keenly felt in modern art in fields like design, painting and film. Such a trend I think is beneficial for those studying and working in these areas, as well as the public. The main criticism levelled at the use of technology in the areas above is that it is de-skilling workers. With computer painting and design, including on tablets, students in the above areas are losing basics skills in producing objects by hand. Likewise, children are losing the ability even to hold implements like pens and brushes, to coordinate their actions, to plan and to think through the basic processes for producing something. The same applies to workers in these areas. This is a valid criticism, but the benefits derived from the increasing use of technology in the areas above are huge. Computer software, such as 3D printing, supplements the skills of the students and workers in design, paint and films. The technology does not replace people, but is an additional tool like any other. Another reason why the effect technology is having on the fields above should be seen in a positive light is that these areas have through the ages adapted to the available technology to improve their work for the benefit of society. The latest technology now allows efficient car design and mechanics
The advances in
technology
are being
keenly
felt in modern art in fields like
design
, painting and film. Such a trend I
think
is beneficial for those studying and working in these
areas
,
as well
as the public.

The main criticism levelled at the
use
of
technology
in the
areas
above
is that it is
de-skilling
workers. With computer painting and
design
, including

on tablets, students in the
above
areas
are losing basics
skills
in producing objects by hand.
Likewise
, children are losing the ability even to hold implements like pens and brushes, to coordinate their actions, to plan and to
think
through the basic processes for producing something. The same
applies to
workers in these areas.

This is a valid criticism,
but
the benefits derived from the increasing
use
of
technology
in the
areas
above
are huge. Computer software, such as 3D printing, supplements the
skills
of the students and workers in
design
, paint and films. The
technology
does not replace
people
,
but
is an additional tool like any other.

Another reason why the effect
technology
is having on the fields
above
should be
seen
in a
positive
light is that these
areas
have through the ages adapted

to the available
technology
to
improve
their work for the benefit of society. The latest technology

now
allows
efficient car
design
and
mechanics
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IELTS essay Nowadays there is a grater focus at all levels in education on science and business studies rather than the arts

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