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Nowadays, more and more people are having consumer goods like refrigerators and washing machines. Does this development bring more advantages than disadvantages?

Nowadays, more and more people are having consumer goods like refrigerators and washing machines. Does this development bring more advantages than disadvantages? bY2AB
Durable consumer goods have gained popularity in this modern era. Many households around the world heavily rely on household appliances to cook and preserve food for a short period of time. That means numerous people own electric appliances like refrigerators and washing machines. This essay explains / discusses why the benefits of using these devices moderately outweigh the drawbacks. To begin with, electronic goods used in households consume enormous amounts of electricity owing to the fact that they are used numerous times every day. This results in a surge in the amount of electricity consumed per household compared to the past. While the power stations are generating enough energy at present, there could be shortage of it in the future. There are other downsides too. Home appliances make human labour redundant. Consequently, people are leading highly sedentary lives now and have health problems as a result. Refrigerators and air conditioners are also known to increase the greenhouse effect. On the other hand, these appliances save time and are fairly convenient. Since working professionals do not have time for cooking every day, they can prepare meals and store them in the refrigerator. Similarly, washing machines take care of the laundry without much interference by individuals. As such, these machines come in handy by serving humans at all times and easing their chores. For example, young people do not have to learn to wash their laundries manually; instead, they can put them in the washing machine and carry on with their other tasks. This makes them more efficient and they can complete more tasks in limited time. Hence, these machines play the crucial role of being a life saver for most people around the globe. In conclusion, owning consumer appliances both pros and cons. Despite consuming excessive amounts of energy, these goods support humans by assisting them in daily duties and thus saving time. As a result, I believe that having and using these goods daily can undoubtedly prove more advantageous than disadvantageous.
Durable consumer
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goods
have gained popularity in this modern era.
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Many
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households
around the world
heavily
rely on
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household
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appliances
to cook and preserve food for a short period of
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time
. That means numerous
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people
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own
electric
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appliances
like refrigerators and washing
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machines
. This essay
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explains
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moderately
outweigh the drawbacks.

To
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begin
with, electronic
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goods
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used
in
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households
consume enormous amounts of electricity owing to the fact that they are
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used
numerous
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times
every day. This results in a surge in the amount of electricity consumed per
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household
compared to the past. While the power stations are generating
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enough
energy at present, there could be shortage of it in the future. There are other downsides too. Home
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appliances
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make
human
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redundant.
Consequently
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people
are leading
highly
sedentary
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lives
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now
and have health problems
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. Refrigerators and air conditioners are
also
known to increase the greenhouse effect.

On the other hand
, these
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appliances
save
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time
and are
fairly
convenient. Since working professionals do not have
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time
for cooking every day, they can prepare meals and store them in the refrigerator.
Similarly
, washing
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machines
take care of the laundry without much interference by individuals. As such, these
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machines
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come
in handy by serving humans at all
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times
and easing their chores.
For example
, young
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people
do not
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have to
learn to wash their laundries
manually
;
instead
, they can put them in the washing
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machine
and carry on with their other tasks. This
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makes
them more
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efficient and
they can complete more tasks in limited
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time
.
Hence
, these
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machines
play the crucial role of being a life saver for most
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people
around the globe.

In conclusion
, owning consumer
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appliances
both pros and cons. Despite consuming excessive amounts of energy, these
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goods
support humans by assisting them in daily duties and
thus
saving
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time
.
As a result
, I believe that having and using these
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goods
daily can
undoubtedly
prove more advantageous than disadvantageous.
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IELTS essay Nowadays, more and more people are having consumer goods like refrigerators and washing machines. Does this development bring more advantages than disadvantages?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
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