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managing children in this organization has drawn me more to these children and over the years I can’t hold back my tears when I see them re-unite with their parents or probably finish secondary

managing children in this organization has drawn me more to these children and over the years I can’t hold back my tears when I see them re-unite with their parents or probably finish secondary m18pd
My managing children in this organization has drawn me more to these children and over the years I can’t hold back my tears when I see them re-unite with their parents or probrably finish secondary school, gain admission into the University or graduate from a University. These are the happiest moments of my life. I am also move to tears when they give me so much credit on how I have help them achieve what they have become. It so exhilaraing and fufilling I have resolved that to continue to offer help and support to vulnertable children, teenagers in the society. To do this better I will need to continously improve on myself and I am also blessed to have a family that supports me. T
My managing children in this organization has drawn me more to these children and over the years I can’t hold back my tears when I
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see
them re-unite with their parents or
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probrably
finish secondary school, gain admission into the University or graduate from a University. These are the happiest moments of my life. I am
also
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move
to tears when they give me
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so
much credit on how I have
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help
them achieve what they have become. It
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so
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exhilaraing
and
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fufilling


I have resolved that to continue to offer
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help
and support to
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vulnertable
children,
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teenagers
in the society. To do this better I will need to
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continously
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improve
on
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
myself and
I am
also
blessed to have a family that supports me.

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IELTS essay managing children in this organization has drawn me more to these children and over the years I can’t hold back my tears when I see them re-unite with their parents or probably finish secondary

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  American English
3 paragraphs
125 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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