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It is sometimes argued that too many students go to university, while others claim that a university education should be a universal right. Discuss both sides of the argument and give your own opinion.

In some advanced countries, it is not unusual for more than 50% of young adults to attend college or university. Critics, however, claim that many university courses are worthless and young people would be better off gaining skills in the workplace. In this essay, I will examine both sides of this argument and try to reach a conclusion. There are several reasons why young people today believe they have the right to a university education. First, growing prosperity in many parts of the world has increased the number of families with money to invest in their children’s future. At the same time, falling birthrates mean that one- or two-child families have become common, increasing the level of investment in each child. It is hardly surprising, therefore, that young people are willing to let their families support them until the age of 21 or 22. Furthermore, millions of new jobs have been created in knowledge industries, and these jobs are typically open only to university graduates. However, it often appears that graduates end up in occupations unrelated to their university studies. It is not uncommon for an English literature major to end up working in sales, or an engineering graduate to retrain as a teacher, for example. Some critics have suggested that young people are just delaying their entry into the workplace, rather than developing professional skills. A more serious problem is that the high cost of a university education will mean that many families are reluctant to have more than one child, exacerbating the falling birthrates in certain countries. In conclusion, while it can be argued that too much emphasis is placed on a university education, my own opinion is that the university years are a crucial time for personal development. If people enter the workplace aged 18, their future options may be severely restricted. Attending university allows them time to learn more about themselves and make a more appropriate choice of career.
In
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advanced countries, it is not unusual for more than 50% of
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young
adults to attend college or
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university
. Critics,
however
, claim that
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many
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courses are worthless and
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young
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people
would be better off gaining
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skills
in the workplace. In this essay, I will examine both sides of this argument and try to reach a conclusion.

There are several reasons why
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young
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people
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today
believe they have the right to a
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university
education.
First
, growing prosperity in
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many
parts of the world has increased the number of
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families
with money to invest in their children’s future. At the same time, falling birthrates mean that one- or two-child
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families
have become common, increasing the level of investment in each child. It is hardly surprising,
therefore
, that
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young
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people
are willing to
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let
their
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families
support them until the age of 21 or 22.
Furthermore
, millions of new jobs have
been created
in knowledge industries, and these jobs are
typically
open
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only
to
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university
graduates.

However
, it
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often
appears that graduates
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end
up in occupations unrelated to their
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university
studies. It is not uncommon for an English literature major to
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end
up working in sales, or an engineering graduate to retrain as a teacher,
for example
.
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Some
critics have suggested that
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young
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people
are
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just
delaying their entry into the workplace,
rather
than developing professional
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skills
. A more serious problem is that the high cost of a
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university
education will mean that
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many
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families
are reluctant to have more than one child, exacerbating the falling birthrates in certain countries.

In conclusion
, while it can
be argued
that too much emphasis
is placed
on a
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university
education, my
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own
opinion is that the
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university
years are a crucial time for personal development. If
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people
enter the workplace aged 18, their future options may be
severely
restricted. Attending
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university
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
them time to learn more about themselves and
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make
a more appropriate choice of career.
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IELTS essay It is sometimes argued that too many students go to university, while others claim that a university education should be a universal right.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
323 words
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