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In today's world where crimes and offenses are at the apex, the only hope of justice seems to come from an unbiased jury.

In today's world where crimes and offenses are at the apex, the only hope of justice seems to come from an unbiased jury. OVyJ3
In today's world where crimes and offenses are at the apex, the only hope of justice seems to come from an unbiased jury. The jury is the paramount body in the system of Justice. Through their verdicts, offenders are given deserving punishments. For the Jury to make a sound decision about a criminal, they should be given all past criminal records of the offenders. It will give them a bigger picture of the seriousness of their crimes, and help them make wiser decisions, and predict the future behaviors of offenders. For instance, a study was conducted on whether the Jury should have access to a criminal's history or not in America. When the jury was given the information they needed, the number of offenses had decreased by 15%. This was primarily because judges were able to predict future discrepancies of the criminals and give deserving sentences and punishments. This act saved many people from becoming victims of future offenses. Not letting information about criminals out to judges can have detrimental effects on the system of justice. For example, a criminal is convicted of forgery and is presented in front of a jury who knows nothing of his past crimes like murder or theft. They might decide to forgive this person or give him a short sentence as in their opinion his crime might not be 'that' serious. But when he gets out after 5 or even 6 months he will continue his offenses and crimes, and thus many innocent people will victim to his cruelty. To conclude my opinion, it is better to give the jury access to a criminal's records. This will help the judges make wise and unbiased verdicts, and will also help them protect humanity from further damage
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and offenses are at the apex, the
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hope of justice seems to
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from an unbiased
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jury
. The
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jury
is the paramount body in the system of Justice. Through their verdicts, offenders are
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given
deserving punishments.

For the
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Jury
to
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make
a sound decision about a
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criminal
, they should be
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given
all past
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criminal
records of the offenders. It will
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give
them a bigger picture of the seriousness of their
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crimes
, and
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help
them
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make
wiser decisions, and predict the future behaviors of offenders.

For instance
, a study
was conducted
on whether the
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Jury
should have access to a criminal's history or not in America. When the
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jury
was
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given
the information they needed, the number of offenses had decreased by 15%. This was
primarily
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because
judges were able to predict future discrepancies of the
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criminals
and
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give
deserving sentences and punishments. This act saved
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many
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people
from becoming victims of future offenses.

Not letting information about
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criminals
out to judges can have detrimental effects on the system of justice.
For example
, a
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criminal
is convicted
of forgery and
is presented
in front of a
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jury
who knows nothing of his past
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crimes
like murder or theft. They might decide to forgive this person or
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give
him a short sentence as in their opinion his
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crime
might not be 'that' serious.
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But
when he
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gets
out after 5 or even 6 months he will continue his offenses and
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crimes
, and
thus
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many
innocent
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people
will victim to his cruelty.

To conclude
my opinion, it is better to
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give
the
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jury
access to a criminal's records. This will
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help
the judges
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make
wise and unbiased verdicts, and will
also
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help
them protect humanity from
further
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damage
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IELTS essay In today's world where crimes and offenses are at the apex, the only hope of justice seems to come from an unbiased jury.

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