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In recent years, more and more big multinational companies are being established and they are expanding their business worldwide. Thus a number of small businesses are declining. I strongly believe that this has more advantages than its disadvantages. On the one hand, multinational companies or businesses may have a lot of branches worldwide and this requires big space to build-up their branches, own buildings or their headquarters. This kind of multinational businesses or companies prefer to build their own branches in the cities not in suburb areas and this can cause to traffic congestion or this can lead to a rise in the price of land in urban cities. Another drawback of this is that, if the multinational companies and their branches enlarge their brands or businesses there will be monopoly in these kind of companies. Monopoly companies will be a lot of sorts they produce something, service or digital company, they can be monopoly in many areas. For example, KFC,

In recent years, more and more big multinational companies are being established and they are expanding their business worldwide. Thus a number of small businesses are declining. I strongly believe that this has more advantages than its disadvantages. On the one hand, multinational companies or businesses may have a lot of branches worldwide and this requires big space to build-up their branches, own buildings or their headquarters. This kind of multinational businesses or companies prefer to build their own branches in the cities not in suburb areas and this can cause to traffic congestion or this can lead to a rise in the price of land in urban cities. Another drawback of this is that, if the multinational companies and their branches enlarge their brands or businesses there will be monopoly in these kind of companies. Monopoly companies will be a lot of sorts they produce something, service or digital company, they can be monopoly in many areas. For example, KFC, bYrlP
In recent years, more and more big multinational companies are being established and they are expanding their business worldwide. Thus a number of small businesses are declining. I strongly believe that this has more advantages than its disadvantages. On the one hand, multinational companies or businesses may have a lot of branches worldwide and this requires big space to build-up their branches, own buildings or their headquarters. This kind of multinational businesses or companies prefer to build their own branches in the cities not in suburb areas and this can cause to traffic congestion or this can lead to a rise in the price of land in urban cities. Another drawback of this is that, if the multinational companies and their branches enlarge their brands or businesses there will be monopoly in these kind of companies. Monopoly companies will be a lot of sorts they produce something, service or digital company, they can be monopoly in many areas. For example, KFC, Microsoft, Google and many other this kind of companies and businesses are the biggest monopoly companies worldwide. But on the another hand, this has benefits for both governments and for society. Firstly, if multinational companies establish or expand their companies worldwide they will pay tax for the governments that they are building-up their companies and this is very good for governments budgets. Secondly, nowadays there are very high rate of unemployment worldwide so if large companies expand their businesses in one particular area there will be a low rate of unemployment. For instance, companies like McDonald’s have branches more than 80 countries. In some countries people also can work online for some IT companies like Google and Facebook. So in conclusion, this development has some disadvantages however its advantages are more than it. Because it is very beneficial for both governments and for their populations.
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IELTS essay In recent years, more and more big multinational companies are being established and they are expanding their business worldwide. Thus a number of small businesses are declining. I strongly believe that this has more advantages than its disadvantages. On the one hand, multinational companies or businesses may have a lot of branches worldwide and this requires big space to build-up their branches, own buildings or their headquarters. This kind of multinational businesses or companies prefer to build their own branches in the cities not in suburb areas and this can cause to traffic congestion or this can lead to a rise in the price of land in urban cities. Another drawback of this is that, if the multinational companies and their branches enlarge their brands or businesses there will be monopoly in these kind of companies. Monopoly companies will be a lot of sorts they produce something, service or digital company, they can be monopoly in many areas. For example, KFC,

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