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Being A Celebrity Such As A Famous Film Star Or Sports Personality Brings Problems As Well As Benefits v.10

Being A Celebrity Such As A Famous Film Star Or Sports Personality Brings Problems As Well As Benefits v. 10
Many people believe that being a celebrity has many benefits, whereas, other people believe that being a famous personality can be a little problematic also. This essay will showcase the advantages and disadvantages of being a famous person in real life as compared to the reel world. Whether it is a famous celebrity; a sports personality; or any other legendary star, money is not the only thing they get as merit. For instance, fame and respect are very important features because of which everybody wants to become an idol like them. Everyone wants to be famous with a huge amount of fan following and earn a lot of money. Seeing yourself on huge screens and billboards and, getting awarded for your achievements is a dream for many people. To become a famous sports personality or any other celebrity we forget the hidden hard work and time they have invested in their selves to achieve this in their life. Also, such people have a lot of issues with their appearance, therefore, maintaining the always fabulous look becomes very pressurizing. However, listening to personal comments and always being judged by the public on their actions and looks becomes very challenging. Once you become a famous film star, every fan tries to peek into their lives, because of which the privacy is somewhere gone. In conclusion, as every coin has two sides, similarly being a famous personality also has many benefits as well as problems. It depends on the individual how confident he is, and how well he carries himself in the public. Therefore, it becomes the responsibility of the individual how he takes fame in a positive way or turns it into a negative way.
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people
believe that being a celebrity has
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many
benefits, whereas, other
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people
believe that being a
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famous
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personality
can be a
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little
problematic
also
. This essay will showcase the advantages and disadvantages of being a
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famous
person in real life as compared to the reel world.

Whether it is a
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famous celebrity
; a sports
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personality
; or any other legendary star, money is not the
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only
thing they
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get
as merit.
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, fame and respect are
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very
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important
features
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because
of which everybody wants to
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become
an idol like them. Everyone wants to be
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famous
with a huge amount of fan following and earn
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a lot of
money. Seeing yourself on huge screens and billboards and, getting awarded for your achievements is a dream for
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many
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people
.

To
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become
a
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famous
sports
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personality
or any other celebrity we forget the hidden
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hard
work and time they have invested in their selves to achieve this in their life.
Also
, such
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people
have
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a lot of
issues with their appearance,
therefore
, maintaining the always fabulous look
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becomes
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very
pressurizing.
However
, listening to personal comments and always
being judged
by the public on their actions and looks
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becomes
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very
challenging. Once you
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become
a
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famous
film star, every fan tries to peek into their
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lives
,
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because
of which the privacy is somewhere gone.

In conclusion
, as every coin has two sides,
similarly
being a
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famous
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personality
also
has
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many
benefits
as well
as problems. It depends on the individual how confident he is, and how well he carries himself in the public.
Therefore
, it
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becomes
the responsibility of the individual how he takes fame in a
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positive
way or turns it into a
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negative
way.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Being A Celebrity Such As A Famous Film Star Or Sports Personality Brings Problems As Well As Benefits v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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